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Postby not damonk on Tue Apr 24, 2001 2:17 am

heh.<P>well, if you want <I>honest</I> opinions, i'll give 'em (no, don't worry, it's not <I>that</I> bad... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspot.com/KeenBoard/wink.gif"> ) -- and remember that these are just my <I>personal</I> thoughts here, not some fact or law:<P>the art is good, and the colouring, too.<P>the humour makes me smile at times, but not chuckle. it's not that it's not funny, but just that i've seen it all before... <P>My biggest problem with the strip as is, if I had to give one solid piece of criticism, is that it's too much of a clone of Penny Arcade.<P>The art style almost imitates it, the panel arrangements are pretty much identical, the colour schemes are likewise very similar, the humour is from the exact same vein (gamer humour), the tone of the characters emulates Tycho and Gabe's attitude, the characters almost ressemble the Penny Arcade stars (heck, put a pacman t-shirt on Djuxtapose, and we have twins), even the navbar dropdown and the explanatory line for each strip is just a spinoff of Penny Arcade...<P>Now this isn't being said to say you suck, 'cause you don't. But what you have there is not original, and too close to being a carbon copy.<P>The artist seems to have talent, and the writing isn't bad, so I bet that it wouldn't be hard for you guys to try something different, something that's less of a knockoff.<P>But that's just me.<P>Still, wouldn't you guys love to be known for having an original concept that <I>others</I> would want to imitate?<P>I bet you that with a bit of retooling and thought, you guys could do it no prob.<P>So, to sum up, what I'm saying is that I see lots of potential in your little team, but right now it's being wasted on imitating something that's already been done far too many times, rather than dare to use its strengths and strike out new ground... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspot.com/KeenBoard/biggrin.gif"><P>So g'wan.<P>Be daring.<P>I <I>double</I> dare ya. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspot.com/KeenBoard/cool.gif"><P>------------------
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Postby Bolcseseg on Tue Apr 24, 2001 2:34 am

well, i think i'd have to agree with (not) damonk there about it being really similar to penny arcade, but:<P>that one with training your creature to act like christopher walken gave me a very good feeling...what a wonderful concept.
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Postby not damonk on Tue Apr 24, 2001 2:38 am

that was my favorite one too, BTW, but Walken is also used way too much in gamer comics, for some strange reason...<P>still, walken is just cool, which makes it all good. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspot.com/KeenBoard/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Beltane on Tue Apr 24, 2001 2:44 am

I think our ultimate goal is to branch off and do something totally new while incorporating the stuff that works for us and many other people: keeping it simple and as accessable as possible. The art style is definitely something that is in the process of evolving and I think we wanted to solidify our two main characters before branching out into other areas that will move us past the "influenced by PA" stage. We've got a whole host of characters waiting in the wings and hopefully, with some ideas we've been kicking around, we can become whatever it is we're on our way to becoming.<P>Hope hope. =)<P>Thank you so much for the responses. We're taking this to heart.<P>Beltane
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Postby Beltane on Tue Apr 24, 2001 8:41 am

Hi there. I'm Beltane from <A HREF="http://www.blackrage.org" TARGET=_blank>http://www.blackrage.org</A> and I was hoping that I could maybe get some feedback from web comic fans.
Myself and DJuxtapose (one of my staff writers) started doing a comic together recently. He began it, mostly doing it for his own amusement and because I begged him to do one for the site. Now with his art work and our combined story ideas, we think its on its way to becoming (hopefully) something of quality. <P>If you have the time, have a look at <A HREF="http://www.blackrage.org/comic/" TARGET=_blank>http://www.blackrage.org/comic/</A> and let us know what you think. <P>Beltane<P>------------------
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