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Experimental Tedd/Elliot fanfic (Be warned)

Postby dahoughtonuk on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:54 am

I was trying to get roughly Q99's style here. This is an alternate universe.

(Alternate universe)

Nanase: This isn't working, Elliot.

Elliot: Have I done something wrong?

Nanase: No, I've realised that I'm not attracted to men. And I dated you as a test, and you were doing the same thing.

Elliot: I'm not gay

Nanase: Didn't say you were. You were using me to check your orientation because you've fallen for a guy.

Elliot: YOU LIE!!

(Nanase looks at him)

Elliot: Too hefty a denial wasn't it? -Tedd Verres.

Nanase: My insane cousin? He hardly counts as a guy.

Elliot: He counts! (shocked) Tedd's your cousin?

Nanase: Not suprising, when you consider his strucure is almost female. I told him that if he didn't want to be so androgynous he should cut his hair.

Nanase: How did you meet?

Elliot: When we were ten. Just lets say we agreed never to speak of that incident.

Nanase: Let me guess, you rushed to Tedd's aid after mistaking him for a girl.

Elliot: I can't tell him.

Nanase: Why not?

Elliot: What's his biggest fear?

Nanase: Being attractive to men.

Elliot: And telling him that his best friend who never seemed to be interested him while they're both men...

Nanase: A betrayal. BUt I think you might be suprised...

Elliot: Why?

Nanase: I always wondered who he was comparing his 'ugly cousin' to. Now I know.

Elliot: I find you attractive, and think you're beautiful

Nanase: Yeah, but you truly love Tedd. And he loves you whether he's willing to admit it or not.

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Nanase: Your fear is getting in the way of what you want, Tedd.

Tedd: I don't need to listen to my 'ugly cousin'

Nanase: You prefer Elliot, don't you?

Tedd: Only when one of us is female.

Nanase: Your so afraid of teasing about being gay, but do you think the jocks' jabs would hurt so much if it wasn't for the fact you did have some attraction to male Elliot while you were both male?

Tedd: NO WAY!!

Nanase: Must have been so romantic having a white knight coming charging to your rescue.

Tedd:(wistful and angry) NO! (realising) How the hell do you know I was talking about Elliot?

Nanase: Look you supress that attraction, why?

Tedd: I'm a pervert. Still that crosses the boundaries of what's acceptable. And besides I'm scared I'll get stuck as a girl.

Nanase: But if you admit you're attracted to him when you're both guys.

Tedd: But what if he isn't attracted to me.

Nanase: I hate to say it, but you are that androgynous. He's attracted to you when female, so he's physically attracted when your male.

Tedd: But he never said anything.

Nanase: Your fears remember? Why would he risk losing you?

Tedd: He wouldn't lose me. I love him too much.

Elliot: That's sweet.

Nanase: what are you two waiting for?

(Tedd and Elliot at first kiss nervously, then passionatley. )

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Bastian Prophecy

Catkin:
Elled speak of trust. Yet, trust not the fallen, kin

Actual:
Elled, speak of trust, yet trust not the fallen kin


El Goonish Shive - Discussion about Tedd
Ellen: Oh, stop it. You thought he was cute too, ya know.
Elliot: YOU LIE!!!
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Postby Tonetone on Wed Oct 12, 2005 12:49 pm

I dunno.. It doesn't really work in a script-style.
You might want to re-do it, in a traditional paragraph.
Good story, though.
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Postby Q99 on Thu Oct 13, 2005 2:03 am

Hah, I think it's awesome! (And not just because you mention me. I can't believe someone's actually aiming for my style ^_^:;)

Nanase makes a great matchmaker, it really makes perfect sense and makes a fun reversal from her main-universe situation as well. And I think for the most part, the script-style works just fine, but you might consider adding a bit more discriptive action at the end, when Elliot comes it.


Overall though, like I said, I really like it. ^_^
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Postby Kraggi on Thu Oct 13, 2005 7:43 pm

My eyes burn from reading that. It's scary imagining tedd and elliot kiss. Just scary. Good writing, but its scary. Stay away from scary! Scary scares me! It's too edgy! It seems to realistic! Stay outside the boundaries of realism! It seems too much like it could happen! If that happened I would gouge out my eyes wiht a spork.
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Postby Tonetone on Thu Oct 13, 2005 8:18 pm

Kraggi wrote:My eyes burn from reading that. It's scary imagining tedd and elliot kiss. Just scary. Good writing, but its scary. Stay away from scary! Scary scares me! It's too edgy! It seems to realistic! Stay outside the boundaries of realism! It seems too much like it could happen! If that happened I would gouge out my eyes wiht a spork.

Maybe you should've read the topic title or something.
Like, some people might be offended by how you find a homosexual kiss offensive. But these are the kind of people say being gay is a culture and that kind of stupid stuff and they make me mad as hell.
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Postby Ted Logan on Fri Oct 14, 2005 5:22 am

Tonetone wrote:
Kraggi wrote:My eyes burn from reading that. It's scary imagining tedd and elliot kiss. Just scary. Good writing, but its scary. Stay away from scary! Scary scares me! It's too edgy! It seems to realistic! Stay outside the boundaries of realism! It seems too much like it could happen! If that happened I would gouge out my eyes wiht a spork.

Maybe you should've read the topic title or something.
Like, some people might be offended by how you find a homosexual kiss offensive. But these are the kind of people say being gay is a culture and that kind of stupid stuff and they make me mad as hell.
Hrm.... I know I'm not Kraggi, but the idea of Elliot and Tedd kissing is a tad more disturbing than you give credit for. I don't think Kraggi was actually disturbed by the idea of two guys kissing, and was disturbed by those two specific guys kissing.
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Postby dahoughtonuk on Fri Oct 14, 2005 5:38 am

I think I can understand why. It's not so much that Tedd and Elliot kiss. (There have been plenty of jokes about that). It's that a Tedd and Elliot so similar to the mainline ones do..
Bastian Prophecy

Catkin:
Elled speak of trust. Yet, trust not the fallen, kin

Actual:
Elled, speak of trust, yet trust not the fallen kin


El Goonish Shive - Discussion about Tedd
Ellen: Oh, stop it. You thought he was cute too, ya know.
Elliot: YOU LIE!!!
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Postby Tonetone on Fri Oct 14, 2005 6:10 am

Um, I was joking.
I put in that crack at.. The homosexual equivalent of angry feminists to make it more obvious..
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Postby Berk on Fri Oct 14, 2005 7:42 am

Nice Story. However, I must point out this.
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Postby Q99 on Fri Oct 14, 2005 2:06 pm

Berk wrote:Nice Story. However, I must point out this.


Aka visual reference for Elliot/Tedd relationship fans :)
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Postby dahoughtonuk on Sun Oct 16, 2005 7:10 am

Tonetone, I guess part of yours was a joke, but its hard to tell without smiley.

Berk. It depends why Tedd is so frightened. Is it the same reason as mainline Elliot is so disturbed by being attracted to Tedd? (He was happy enough to admit m-Susan was hot, but admit attraction to Tedd. No, never.)
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Catkin:
Elled speak of trust. Yet, trust not the fallen, kin

Actual:
Elled, speak of trust, yet trust not the fallen kin


El Goonish Shive - Discussion about Tedd
Ellen: Oh, stop it. You thought he was cute too, ya know.
Elliot: YOU LIE!!!
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Postby JONJONAUG on Sun Oct 16, 2005 7:58 am

Good, but it still made my eyes bleed.
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