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Q99's Goonmaji dimension fanfic, Chapter 2! Elliot and Grace

Postby Q99 on Tue Dec 20, 2005 9:33 am

Once again, the Siren's song of fanfic has called me back, and once again I have satisfied this urge by writing a short semi-romantic fic about two characters. Like in previous fics, nothing R (or even close to it) happens 'on screen', but some stuff is implied, so if you aren't interested, don't read, if you are, scroll down and enjoy:















Q99's Goonmaji dimension Sarah-Tedd/Tedd-Sarah fanfic



"Hey Tedd!"

"That's Sarah..." Sarah growled at Tedd... in her body. Or his now, really.

"Right, sorry. It's just been so confusing lately." she replied.

"I'd have thought you'd be used to stuff like this by now, especially with how often you've been stopping by."

"You'd think so, but no. Permanently being switched into a different body is a lot different from accidentally turning you into a cat..." Sarah-in-Tedd's body growled a bit at Verres again, "... and I'm really not adjusting as well as I'd though."

Sarah blink and brushed aside some purple hair, surprised at the confession, "Really? I'd assumed you'd handle this better than anyone."

"Yea, I'd have thought so too if you had asked me before the game. Especially getting a sexy female body like yours."

He blushed a bit at the compliment, "I thought you said my breasts were too small before all this happened."

"I, err.." Tedd stammered and ran her hand through her blonde hair nervously in a fashion Sarah found himself finding rather cute.

Did I really look like that? he wondered to himself. I'm kind of cute...

"Well, it's a lot different when I actually have 'em for more than a day or so." Had it been four weeks?, "I have a lot more respect for you now."

"Does that mean you didn't have respect for me before?" Sarah asked with a smirk and folded his hands across his chest.

"I, err... I never didn't respect you per-say..." Tedd looked away and her face turned red, why is -she- blushing?, "Er, anyway. I was wondering if you've noticed any other effects of the switch. Like liking different food, or other preferences..."

"Well, I have been getting used to slightly different taste bud..." Sarah paused. It clicked. "Preferences? You're attracted to guys?"

Tedd nodded sheepishly and looked down at her feat, "Or at least a guy. I do have your hormones..."

"Yea, but I'd assume that wouldn't be enough to overcome your previous preference. You did like girls an awful lot..."

"... maybe you're just that androgynous" Tedd grinned a bit and moved her hair aside in a very Sarah-gesture.

It was Sarah's turn to blush again.

He thought it over for a moment while the blonde next to him waited for a response.

Finally, Sarah smiled and he put his arms around her, and wondered how much Tedd's hormones were affecting him, What could be the harm?, "Oh Sara.. no, wait! I mean-" Tedd cut him off with a kiss before Sarah could correct himself.


*Fade to black, end of fic*



New: Chapter 2 on the next page
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Postby Sqauto on Tue Dec 20, 2005 12:17 pm

DAMN THAT.

It should be canon.

:lol:

Anyway, you did a good job Q. You allowed them to have some fun that way (which is always good). As to the setting, good choice having it set a month after "the game" (great name for the event).

All round, not bad.
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Postby Youngest_Of_One on Tue Dec 20, 2005 1:23 pm

Tee hee.

I'm really giggling more than anyone should (anyone male, anyway).

Nice job, Q. Well-written indeed.
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Postby Q99 on Wed Dec 21, 2005 5:04 am

Glad it made you giggle, Youngest :)


Thanks both of you for reading my little fic. If anyone else did, please comment! I'm still fairly rookie at this, so tell me what you'd recommend instead, what you like, or just a simple 'I read it'. It'll be appreciated!
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Postby Berk on Wed Dec 21, 2005 5:44 am

That was amusing, but I had to read it twice through because the first time I mixed the two of them up. Good work.
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Postby Grim Atescu on Wed Dec 21, 2005 6:13 am

You know, this is very good. Especially for a rookie fanfic-writer. You've got a good grasp of who the characters are, and that's always a plus.

I love how it ended, too! *laughs at ending*
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Postby Q99 on Wed Dec 21, 2005 6:50 am

Berk wrote:That was amusing, but I had to read it twice through because the first time I mixed the two of them up. Good work.




*looks it over* I don't see how anyone can get Tedd-in-Sarah's body who's picked up some of Sarah's mannarisms and Sarah-in-Tedd's body who gets refered to as Tedd at the start of the fic confused :D
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Postby eternaljwh on Wed Dec 21, 2005 7:11 am

Youngest_Of_One wrote:I'm really giggling more than anyone should (anyone male, anyway).
No such thing as too much laughter. It is, indeed, a good story...believably the same characters. Something I'm convinced I can't do...yet.
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Postby Q99 on Wed Dec 21, 2005 12:32 pm

eternaljwh wrote:No such thing as too much laughter. It is, indeed, a good story...believably the same characters. Something I'm convinced I can't do...yet.


You should try it out, we could use some more fanfic around here.

When I write, I don't trust my ability to map characters onto a story, so I try and think about the characters and one situation they'd be fun in (in this case, the end), and then try and piece a bit of story around it. Starting small helps too- it's not too hard to get something right for just a paragraph or two as compared to a large story, after all.
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Postby Kraggi on Wed Dec 21, 2005 7:15 pm

Lets see, lets do the post fanfic check. Did I claw my eyes out? *Pokes eyes* Nope. Have I been blinded? *Waves hand in front of face* No.
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Postby Q99 on Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:48 pm

Kraggi wrote:Lets see, lets do the post fanfic check. Did I claw my eyes out? *Pokes eyes* Nope. Have I been blinded? *Waves hand in front of face* No.


Always a good sign :)

WOOOOO! GREAT FANFIC! I WUVS IT!



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Postby Scribble_the_Scribe on Fri Dec 23, 2005 9:04 pm

Yes, excellent, confusing, and ending in forbidden love. Exactly what I would expect from a fan-fiction of EGS.
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Postby Q99 on Sun Dec 25, 2005 11:11 am

One *bump* to keep it on the front page and draw anyone who's just sitting around reading the boards.
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Postby Lomgren on Sun Dec 25, 2005 12:06 pm

Hmm, it is pretty good, now that I've read it. And I think I know where the confusion between the two comes from. It's when Sarah-in-Tedd growls a bit when Tedd-in-Sarah is talking. That's where I got confused at, at least.
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Postby matthlord on Sun Dec 25, 2005 2:30 pm

May:Good fanfic,wait a minute.......Tedd and Sarah?.......kissing?.........
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Postby Q99 on Mon Dec 26, 2005 6:34 pm

matthlord wrote:May:Good fanfic,wait a minute.......Tedd and Sarah?.......kissing?.........
*brain shuts down*
Matthlord:Way to go......you broke her brain.....Now I have to fix it....again.....*gives May a beer*
May:What happened?......
Matthlord:Just stay away from this thread.......
May:If you say so......


Ah well, one must expect a little collateral brainfry damage...
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Postby NumberFourtyThree on Mon Dec 26, 2005 7:51 pm

Well remember that since they are in each others bodies it would seem like kissing yourself to them (as wierd as that sounds).
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Postby Q99 on Wed Dec 28, 2005 9:18 pm

NumberFourtyThree wrote:Well remember that since they are in each others bodies it would seem like kissing yourself to them (as wierd as that sounds).



They're both closet narcissists?
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Postby Scotty on Thu Dec 29, 2005 12:37 am

Q99 wrote:
NumberFourtyThree wrote:Well remember that since they are in each others bodies it would seem like kissing yourself to them (as wierd as that sounds).



They're both closet narcissists?

Well, Sarah *does* pose naked in front of mirrors. And don't tell me that it's for the sake of art, cause I'm not buying it.
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Postby Platinum Dragon on Thu Dec 29, 2005 3:27 am

Scotty wrote:
Q99 wrote:
NumberFourtyThree wrote:Well remember that since they are in each others bodies it would seem like kissing yourself to them (as wierd as that sounds).



They're both closet narcissists?

Well, Sarah *does* pose naked in front of mirrors. And don't tell me that it's for the sake of art, cause I'm not buying it.


And Tedd admitted that he was "either a narcissist or just that girly."

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Postby Q99 on Thu Dec 29, 2005 5:53 pm

Indeed, they're clearly made for each other!... when they are each other :lol:
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Postby Q99 on Sun Jan 01, 2006 3:17 am

Hmm... since previous posts have attracted more discussion, one more can't hurt. Bump.
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Postby Jonixlord on Thu Aug 03, 2006 2:18 pm

Nice fanfic. one question. I don't know if anyone has asked, but what happened to Elliot and Grace after the game?
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Postby Q99 on Fri Aug 04, 2006 6:45 am

Jonixlord wrote:Nice fanfic. one question. I don't know if anyone has asked, but what happened to Elliot and Grace after the game?


Ahh... that *is* a good question. I didn't think about it at the time.
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Postby Q99 on Fri Aug 04, 2006 6:07 pm

Q99's Goonmaji dimension fanfic part two: Grace and Elliot


Elliot pushed the larger Grace away with one of her arms, breaking the unexpected kiss.

"Grace, what the heck??" the Squirrel-form girl asked in surprise.

Grace backed off, his face immediately telling Elliot he knew he had made a mistake, with the odd bonus of doing so with his old features to boot.

"I'm...

.. sorry Elliot!"


Elliot soften almost immediately, his antenna lowering a bit. Even in his hot body, did I just think my old body was hot?, Grace's expression were still as cute as ever and could soften any situation.

She reached an arm forward and put it on her old arm, "I'm not mad! You just really caught me by surprise. Where'd that come from?" Elliot asked, hoping to calm the squirrel turned... him down a bit.

Grace look sheepish and glanced down at his fingertips which he was lightly pressing against each other, his bangs (still in Elliot's old hairstyle; he said it reminded him of his old antenna) sliding forward and covering his eyes a little, "Ever since I got this body, I've been adjusting to new feelings, and I've be having a lot of fun with you recently and I... well, I just like you."


Elliot paused to consider, the thoughts whirling in her head. With Tedd and Sarah being with each other, Grace and her had been spending a lot of time, and, she admits to herself, time she had been enjoying just as much as Grace had, together, which was pretty much the only thing keeping Elliot from finding the single life temporarily sans two of her best friends unbearably lonely. And besides, it's not like there were a lot of other eligable people that she knew as well or who were as good friends as Grace, now that she was off Justin's menu in addition to Tedd and Sarah. She shrugs, shoulders and antennae together, then smiled, leaning and putting one hand on her hips, trying to look sexy in a body she was still getting used to.

"What the heck? I suppose we can give dating a try."




She immediately had second thoughts as her new boyfriend came pouncing through the air.

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