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Postby Illusionist on Sun Mar 09, 2008 1:29 pm

Sandman reference! YES!

Oh, also, good fanfic.

"I'm going to help Nanase"...sure. Help. We all know what you mean, Ellen!
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby CidGregor on Mon Apr 21, 2008 11:45 am

In an interesting turn of events, the delay this time was actually not because of laziness or writer's block, but rather because this chapter went through more revisions than almost any other chapter I've ever written of....ANYTHING. I was very unhappy with the way it kept turning out, and made frequent revisions to exactly what went on. I'm STILL not completely happy with it, but hopefully you will find it at least presentable now. In any case, apologies for the delay again, and hope you enjoy.

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Basic Instinct

Chapter Seven: Hot n’ Bothered


It was fortunate – for her experiment at least, Ellen thought – that the current unit in gym class was something as active and physical as basketball. A lot of good-looking, muscular and sweaty guys were certainly going to be eye-catching. But where most girls would probably appreciate it as little more than eye candy, Grace on the other hand…

Well. She wasn’t entirely sure how Grace was going to react, but considering what she knew of Grace’s troubles, Ellen was sure it would be a significantly stronger reaction than most. She wasn’t expecting anything blatant, of course, but for some reason she didn’t want to dismiss the possibility. From the sound of Grace’s dreams, this problem of hers was getting steadily worse, and if that kept up, it was only a matter of time before it grew beyond dirty dreams and she started thinking with the wrong brain, willingly or not. And that wasn’t good for anyone.

Ellen glanced beside her at the girl in question. Grace was sitting on the locker room bench in her gym clothes, apparently as lost in thought as Ellen had been. It was obvious this was deeply troubling her. Anyone who spent two seconds in their company knew that Grace and Tedd were custom-made for each other and that she loved him with every ounce of her heart. For her to suddenly start feeling unfamiliar attractions to a handful of other guys had to be beyond upsetting. And if Tedd found out, it was going to make her feel ten times worse. Ellen had half a mind to call the experiment off and make up a reason for her not to be in class, but she knew Grace would refuse that idea point-blank; skipping school might as well be a capital crime to that girl. She was going to have to get through it either way, so the least Ellen could do was watch out for her and see first-hand how she acted around these ‘other guys,’ and keep her in check if things got out of control.

Ellen patted Grace on the shoulder. “C’mon, class is about to start.”

Grace nodded silently and stood up beside her, stretching and visibly trying to keep calm and focused, though Ellen was not too sure it was working. But for better or worse they walked out of the girls’ locker room and into the gym, where most of the class had already gathered. Ellen surveyed the group, divided rather evenly between boys and girls, and divided again between serious players and those just shooting around for fun, and quickly picked out Justin in the latter group.

“Stay here, I’ll be right back,” Ellen gestured to Grace, and jogged over to Justin, though keeping one eye on Grace the whole time.

“Hey, Ellen,” Justin greeted her as she approached, stepping away from the action. “Sorry about lunch, the paper grading took longer than I--”

“Yeah yeah, whatever, shut up and listen for a second,” Ellen muttered, pulling him close and speaking quietly near his ear. “Can you do me a favor?”

“Uhh…I guess so, what’s up?”

“Can you play with the serious guys today?”

Justin gave her a quizzical look. “…why?”

“Just do it for me this one time, okay? I know you can. You don’t even have to be very good, just….play seriously. Work up a sweat.”

“…Are you suggesting I don’t get enough exercise?”

“I’ll explain later!” she hissed. “Just do this for me!”

“Alright, alright, jeez…” Justin said soothingly.

“Thank you,” Ellen said with a nod and hurried back over to Grace. As Ellen had expected, the girl seemed to not even realize she’d been gone, her eyes locked instead on the developing game among the serious players that Justin was just joining. Muscles were flexing, clothes were clinging, and sweat was dripping, and it wasn’t even five minutes in. It was a total testosterone-fest, and Grace was predictably captivated by it.

Okay, so she likes eye candy, big deal, that’s not all that weird, Ellen thought to herself. I need something more…

She watched Grace closely, though discreetly, and after a few moments of observing her and the game, her eyes definitely seemed to be following Justin more than the other boys. Again, nothing too surprising, Ellen thought. Justin was an attractive guy, probably one of the most attractive of the group. Gay guys were notorious for that. There had to be something more that could help her narrow down the problem…

“Hey, Alex!”

Ellen’s head jerked up, Grace’s right behind her. Alex stood in the gym doorway, waving at a buddy of his that had greeted him. Ellen peeked sideways at Grace, and her captivation level seemed to have jumped again, smiling and blushing at the sight of her new friend. He looked a lot like Justin, actually, Ellen noticed. His hair was longer and his muscles were a little more defined, and he didn’t have an earring, but otherwise they looked quite similar. Maybe Grace was developing a thing for blondes…

A second later, to both girls’ surprise, Alex was walking into the gym and casually shedding his jersey, leaving only a sleeveless workout top. Apparently his buddy had invited him to join the game to even out the teams again after Justin had joined. Ellen observed Grace once more, and was definitely noticing a reaction. Her breathing was getting faster, her skin looked flushed, and when Ellen put a hand to her forehead it felt almost feverishly warm.

Grace, conversely, felt Ellen’s hand like it was ice, and squeaked aloud, coming back into focus for the moment and looking at Ellen in surprise. “What, what?!”

“Holy crap…” Ellen marveled. “You’re burning up.”

“I am?” Grace echoed. “Is that bad?”

“It means your body temperature is jumping. And that only really happens when you have a fever, or when you’re doing something really physical, or…when your heart rate goes up…um…some other way.”

“What other way?”

“……” Ellen cleared her throat. “Don’t worry about it, let’s just get you back in the locker room, I think I’ve seen enough…”

“Hey, Grace, you’re in this class too?”

Grace nearly jumped out of her skin at Alex’s voice, and she whirled to face him, smiling nervously and blushing hard. “Hehe, y-yeah, guess so…hi, Alex…”

“Cool, cool,” Alex said, giving her a broad, sincere smile. “And you’re Ellen, right?” he added, smiling at Ellen in turn, who simply nodded, watching him suspiciously.

“I had a great time yesterday, Alex!” Grace announced.

“Heh, me too…”

Ellen was only half-listening to the conversation, though, her mind working to figure out what the deal with this Alex guy was. She just didn’t know what to make of him, she thought to herself. He seemed like a perfectly nice person. But looks were often deceiving. It was entirely possible that whatever was affecting Grace was his doing. For all she knew he was some crazy alternate dimension warlock out to seduce a legion of fangirls!

…Okay, that was a little farfetched, Ellen admitted, but damnit, there was something strange going on here! And she needed to figure out what it was, fast. It was obvious Grace was getting worse from the happy puppy-dog look in her eyes as she smiled at Alex. It was like there was no one and nothing else in the world to her, like the rest of the world just didn’t exist when she was in his presence. And that was definitely not right. That was the look she saved for Tedd.

“Are you gonna play, Alex?” Grace asked, snapping Ellen out of her thoughts.

“Yeah, just for a bit. It’s my free period, so I’ve got some time,” Alex told her.

“Wow, you know how to play basketball too?” she said, practically glowing.

Alex chuckled a bit. “Well, I’m not nearly as good at it as I am at football, but yeah, I know how to play.”

“That’s amazing…” Grace marveled. “I hope you win!”

“I’m gonna try,” Alex assured, smiling at her one more time before waving at them both and hurrying to join the game.

While Grace was content to blush and wave back at him, though, Ellen completely ignored his departure and instead stared slack-jawed at Grace, her mind racing to comprehend the conversation that just took place. One thing was already clear to her: whatever was affecting Grace, it was worse than she’d first thought. It was like she became a whole different person around Alex, almost to the point of schizophrenia, and the two sides’ knowledge of each other was foggy at best. The normal side of her that cared about Tedd seemed to completely disappear when Alex entered the room and be replaced with a total fan-girl who was two steps away from throwing herself at him and cared nothing for the feelings of her other half. And it was pretty obvious how unhealthy that was for her. Ellen needed regular Grace back, fast, which meant getting her away from Alex.

“C’mon, girl, I’ve seen plenty,” Ellen urged, tugging Grace to her feet. “I’ll tell the teacher you’re running a fever. The way you’re blushing I doubt anyone will argue…”

“Huh?” Grace murmured, her tone spacey. “But I wanna watch the game…”

“I know exactly what you wanna watch, and it ain’t that game…” Ellen muttered back, hauling her toward the locker room once again.

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“Hey Elliot?”

“No, Tedd, for the last time, there’s no devious plot concocted by my sister and your cousin to ruin lesbians for you.”

“…that’s not even close to what I was going to ask.”

“That’s why it’s funny.”

“…but it wasn’t funny.”

“…yeah, I know.”

Tedd rolled his eyes and stared back at his textbook, returning to taking notes. “Forget it.”

Elliot raised a concerned eyebrow at his best friend. The two of them were sitting in the back of a rather lively classroom that was supposed to be a study period, but was instead used for free-time by the majority of the class to gossip, nap, or play card games. Tedd, however, was doing none of these things, choosing to actually study instead. Or at least, it was clear he was TRYING to study, but Elliot was positive something was distracting him. And he was equally positive as to what that something was.

“Come on, Tedd, I was just trying to get a smile out of you,” Elliot said. “You’ve been pretty sour lately and it’s starting to weird me out.”

“I’m fine.”

“Sure you are. That’s why you’ve barely said a word today.”

“Well I was GOING to before you made a stupid crack at me.”

“I wasn’t making a crack at you!”

“Yeah, well…shut up!”

Now it was Elliot’s turn to roll his eyes. “That’s real mature, Tedd. You gonna call me a doody head next?”

Tedd fell silent.

“Fine,” Elliot said with a sigh, “be that way.”

Elliot looked back at his own books, and there was silence between them for a long minute.

“…Sorry…” Tedd eventually muttered with a sigh. “I’m just really worked up…”

“I can tell. Seriously, Tedd, what’s wrong?”

“It’s Grace again…”

“I figured. She still distant?”

Tedd shrugged a bit. “I don’t even know anymore. She’s really changing.”

“…And, what, that’s…bad?” Elliot said skeptically.

“I don’t…” he started, trailing off for a moment to gaze at him. “…Elliot, do you think I’m the jealous type?”

Elliot blinked in surprise, not expecting a sidetrack. “Uhh…I guess not…?”

“Seriously, think about it.”

Elliot did so for a moment. “…Well…I don’t know, actually. I guess there hasn’t really been an occasion to base an opinion like that on.”

“Yeah, well. Now there is.”

“…You’re jealous of someone?”

“…I think I might be.”

Elliot thought about that for a moment, trying to connect it to Grace in his head. “Is this some new friend of Grace’s or something?”

“Yeah. Alex. Or something,” Tedd confirmed, sighing miserably. “And he’s perfect.”

“Perfect? Perfect how?”

“Pretty much every way you CAN be perfect. He’s good-looking, he’s in great shape, he’s popular, he’s a sports star…probably has a perfect little family, too…”

Elliot frowned slightly. “Okay, I know where you’re going with this, Tedd, and I’m stopping you right here. There’s no way Grace is gonna end up going for this Alex guy over you.”

Tedd snorted in disbelief. “Easy for you to say when it’s not your girlfriend.”

“It should be easy for you, too. Tedd, remember who we’re talking about for a second here. This is GRACE. She is NOT going to trade you in for some pretty boy.”

“So I’m ugly now?”

“You know what I meant!” Elliot said with an eye-roll. “Grace is crazy about you. We’ve been over this. She’s not going to dump you for some guy she just met.”

“Well she’s been acting like she will,” Tedd muttered. “She doesn’t talk to me as much as she used to, she’s starting to hang out with him a lot now…last night it was almost midnight before she came home because she was out having so much fun with him…and then I thought I heard her say his name in her SLEEP, and when I woke up today she’d already gotten up without me and avoided me all morning, and--”

“Tedd, come on, stop it, you’re making a big deal out of nothing,” Elliot tried to calm him. “So she stays out late one night with a new friend, big deal.”

“But it’s not just some friend of hers, it’s not like she’s staying out with Ellen or you or someone, it’s…”

Tedd trailed off again there, and Elliot frowned slightly in response, his earlier question making sense now. “…so you ARE jealous.”

Tedd winced. “Is it really that bad?”

“Yes,” Elliot said bluntly. “You just said it yourself, you wouldn’t care if it was Ellen and I hanging out with her, but it DOES bother you that she’s hanging out with Alex.”

“Well can you blame me?.!” Tedd snapped defensively. “The guy’s perfect! And what am I? Some unpopular, crazy pervert…”

Elliot laid firm hands on Tedd’s shoulders. “You can think that way if you really want to, Tedd, but I know you know better. Use that big genius head of yours and think about it rationally. You don’t seriously think Grace is going to leave you for some guy she barely knows, do you?”

Tedd paused for a moment.

“Well?”

“….no…I guess…” he said uncertainly, not really looking at him.

“So then why is it that when she makes a new friend that just so happens to be male and starts hanging out with him, the first thing that comes to your mind is that she’s cheating on you? Do you not trust her?”

That got Tedd’s attention. “Of course I do!” he insisted, meeting Elliot’s eyes head-on in an almost challenging manner.

“Then you can stop being jealous. Even if Alex’s the one interested in HER, she’s not going to respond to it because she loves you, and you love her, and most importantly, you TRUST her. Right?”

It was a long moment that Tedd thought about that before he started to answer, but the ring of his phone cut him off just then. He grabbed it quickly, thankful for a break from the heavy conversation. “Hello?”

Tedd, it’s Ellen. Need a favor.

“…Yeah, sure. What do you need?”

Will you come over to Moperville South and pick up Grace after school? I really think she needs to see you.

Tedd tensed slightly. “Why, what happened?”

Nothing, nothing, I just…I really think she could use some time alone with you right now.

Tedd sighed slightly. “I would, but she was going to go hang out with Alex after school today--”

She changed her mind!” Ellen snapped, cutting him off.

“Dah! Jeez, Ellen, what the hell?” Tedd demanded.

Will you just do what I say and come pick up your girlfriend? You can steal Elliot’s car for one afternoon, tell him I owe him one.

“Alright, alright, already, I’ll do it, yeesh! You could ask a little nicer next time, y’know!”

I’m sorry, it’s just important, okay? Get over here the second you get out.

“Whatever you say, master…”

Thank you, bye.

Tedd jerked the phone away from his ear as she slammed her end of the connection closed, and closed his own phone a moment later. “That was weird…”

“What happened?” Elliot asked.

“Ellen demanded I come over to South after school and pick up Grace. Said to borrow your car and she’ll owe you one.”

Elliot raised an eyebrow in response. “You’re right, that IS weird.”

“Yeah. Do you mind? She sounded pretty serious about it.”

“Nah, go ahead,” Elliot said, offering him the keys. “Just don’t do anything stupid with it.”

“Thanks,” Tedd said, taking the keys. “I’ll be careful.”

“And don’t forget what we talked about.”

“Yeah, yeah, trust, love, all that good stuff…” he said halfheartedly.

“I’m serious, Tedd. It’s nothing to worry about.”

“….Yeah. You’re probably right,” Tedd said. “Thanks.”

And as Tedd looked back at his books, trying to focus again, he repeated Elliot’s words over and over to himself in his head. Told himself he was just being paranoid delusional, that Grace wasn’t going to leave him because she’d fallen for Alex.

Because maybe, he thought, if he said it enough…he could convince himself it was true.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby Helseth on Mon Apr 21, 2008 12:46 pm

great chapter MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby CidGregor on Tue Apr 22, 2008 11:12 am

I'm sure it did. :P Glad you enjoyed.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby Amon Star on Tue Apr 22, 2008 1:47 pm

Another good chapter. Funny, nerve racking & moving. I especially liked the Wotch reference.
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Postby CidGregor on Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:34 pm

That's pretty impressive of me, considering I've never read it. :P What reference is this?
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Postby Amon Star on Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:36 pm

CidGregor wrote:That's pretty impressive of me, considering I've never read it. :P What reference is this?

The interdimensional warlock out to create a horde of Fangirls. It was quite a recent storyline if I remember correctly.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby CidGregor on Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:43 pm

Ahh, I see. Sorry to throw ya for a loop there, heh, but glad you got some extra enjoyment out of it.
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Postby Amon Star on Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:45 pm

CidGregor wrote:Ahh, I see. Sorry to throw ya for a loop there, heh, but glad you got some extra enjoyment out of it.

Ha, no worries. Truth be told, I don't read the Wotch either.
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Postby Haylo on Wed Apr 23, 2008 5:52 pm

I love the way you’ve managed to keep this particular subject so clean. I tried to use something like that once and got something I’m not sure I’m old enough to read. Hats off to you!
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Postby CidGregor on Wed Apr 23, 2008 10:39 pm

Heh, it's always a challenge to handle sexuality in a tasteful and non-pornographic manner, isn't it? :wink: And we're not through yet.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby Nasrudith on Thu Apr 24, 2008 9:13 am

Yay for updates! I'm waitng for the next installment. Now Tedd and Grace alone in Elliot's car, that can't end well.
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Postby CidGregor on Thu Apr 24, 2008 1:09 pm

Assuming they GET that far. :wink:
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Postby Nasrudith on Thu Apr 24, 2008 11:16 pm

CidGregor wrote:Assuming they GET that far. :wink:


Yeah I guess on top of the car would be just as bad or worse. :D
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby CidGregor on Tue Jun 24, 2008 9:11 am

Notes: Bleh, didn't mean for this one to take two months, but it also went though quite a few revisions and edits before it felt right, which was way more important this time because it's a fairly pivotal chapter. It's also nearly 4,000 words long, so at least you're getting a real bang for your buck! Hope y'all enjoy, we're in sight of the finish line.

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Basic Instinct

Chapter Eight: Flirting with Disaster


“I’m telling you, she’s gone completely off the deep end.”

“She’s got a crush. It happens. She’ll get past it.”

“This is SO not just a crush, she’s going completely head over heels…”

“She is not, quit exaggerating.”

“Aren’t you supposed to be on MY side here?”

“I don’t want to get involved in stuff that’s not my business.”

“But this could totally doom Tedd and Grace’s relationship forever!”

“C’mon, Ellen, you’re overreacting,” Nanase almost snapped. “It can’t be that bad.”

“I’m telling you it is!” Ellen hissed in a harsh whisper. “And keep your voice down!” she added with a quick glance in Grace’s direction.

Nanase lowered her voice, but rolled her eyes as well. “If you don’t want her to overhear us talking about her behind her back, maybe we should, y’know, stop.

Ellen frowned, but fell silent for a moment, at least, conceding the point as she looked at Grace again. She was walking beside the other two girls through the usual crowd of students toward their biology class, and as had nearly become the norm for the last week, she was walking with her head down and her expression joyless. Ellen couldn’t remember her smiling once this entire week. Until she came into the company of Alex, of course, and then she was smiling and giggling so much might as well have been wearing a shirt that named her his number one fan. That alone told Ellen this was bad and getting worse, why couldn’t Nanase see it?

“Look, you know it can’t be healthy for her and Tedd, you know how he is. Even if it really is nothing, Tedd will beat himself up over it and get all paranoid and stuff…”

“That’s his problem, not Grace’s,” Nanase said back. “If Tedd’s gonna get jealous because she happens to make a new friend that happens to be male, then that’s what’s not healthy for them.”

“…Well, yeah, okay, but--”

“But what?” Nanase stopped her. “You want to keep her from making any new friends that aren’t girls?”

“Nnnhhh, no, but damnit, Nani, that’s exactly the problem, this isn’t just a ‘friend!’” she hissed again. “She’s crushing on him bad! You haven’t seen it in action, you don’t know…”

“Like I said, so what if she has a crush? People get crushes. You don’t magically stop finding people attractive just because you’re in a committed relationship. They’re natural, they pass.”

“Yeah, but what about when they don’t pass? What about when a crush turns into a seriously crazy attraction and you end up leaving the committed relationship because you’re suddenly all into the new guy?”

“What about it?”

“……” Ellen blinked in surprise. “Huh?”

Nanase looked seriously back at her. “So what if she falls for someone else? Maybe that means her and Tedd aren’t meant for each other. Maybe she’s supposed to be with this Alex guy.”

Ellen stared at her in near-horror. “There is no way you can seriously believe that. Two hours ago you were right there with me wondering what was wrong with her for being attracted to him!”

“I’m just making a point. We’re in high school, Ellen. Relationships come and go every single day. Do you know how rare it is for people to stay together for ANY significant length of time at this age? Tedd and Grace have known each other for a couple of months, that’s not even close to enough time to say they’re absolutely meant for each other. Maybe they’re not even meant to be with anyone right now, for all you know.”

“…What are you saying?”

“I’m saying they’re not magically going to stay together just because YOU think they should,” Nanase said as the two of them turned into their next classroom. “If they’re meant to be together, then this Alex thing will work itself out. If they’re not, then nothing you do is gonna change it.”

Still Ellen stared at her as they sat side by side in their seats. “Okay, I get your point, but still, do you actually believe they’re NOT meant for each other? Honestly?”

“…Honestly, no,” Nanase admitted. “If I had to pick one high school couple I most believed would stay together, it’d be them.”

“And you have to admit the way Grace is acting around Alex is WAY weirder than just a silly little crush that’ll eventually go away.”

Nanase couldn’t help but nod. “Yes, it’s definitely weirder. But Grace isn’t normal to begin with. She’s had like NO prior experience with emotions and environments like this. You can’t expect her to react to it all the same way anyone else would. Maybe she’s just doing a really bad job of handling it.”

“Oh come on, I don’t care what circumstances you grew up in, you don’t start having dirty dreams about people days after meeting them.”

“You can’t control what you dream about! You said so yourself!”

“…Yeah, well, you still don’t turn into an oozing pile of goo at every cute guy you see!”

“Okay, NOW you’re exaggerating.”

“I am SO not! Seriously, you haven’t seen her, it’s nauseating!”

“Would you stop talking about her like that? She’s right there--…hey, where’d she go?”

Ellen froze for a split second, then whirled around to look at Grace’s seat, and to her surprise, it was empty.

“Grace…?”

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

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Somewhere well down the hall from her classroom, Grace was walking alone, legs moving on autopilot and unaware that she’d passed her classroom and left Ellen and Nanase behind, she was so inwardly focused. The general din of the student body around her was background noise at best, and not even the occasional arm or shoulder bumping or brushing against her was bringing her back to the outside world. She was far more concerned with her own problems.

Ellen’s ‘experiment’ in gym class, however much it had been based in good intentions, didn’t make things any better, or bring her any closer to understanding what was happening to her. The same thing that had been happening simply happened again, and stronger than ever. The only thing she’d accomplished was to embarrass herself in front of Ellen and Justin now, too.

Why couldn’t she control this? Where were these horrible urges coming from? Why did they make her stare at every boy she saw? She loved Tedd, she repeated to herself over and over. She loved Tedd, she was attracted to Tedd, she wanted to be with Tedd. She couldn’t be attracted to Justin or Elliot or Alex…she just couldn’t be. They were friends. It was supposed to stay that way. And yet there it was, that ugly voice she hated, worming its way into her mind and reminding her that yes, she was attracted to those boys, at least physically, and it was not something she could just brush aside and ignore.

The really strange thing, although it thankfully gave Grace a much-needed emotional boost, was that Tedd wasn’t excluded from the list. As weird as it was to feel these strange, unsettling attractions for other boys, it wasn’t overwriting her feelings for Tedd. On the contrary, she found Tedd more attractive than ever, in the same physical sense that she was finding the other boys attractive. Everything she felt for him before, she still felt now, except now every time she saw him, or pictured him in her mind, her heart rate seemed to jump and her skin flushed and she became unusually interested in the idea of seeing him without a shirt on. Or pants. Or anything. That in itself was a strange thing for her to come to terms with, and Tedd was her boyfriend. When she started thinking that about Justin and Elliot, and most of all Alex, it was way beyond unsettling…

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

The sound finally jerked Grace’s head up and out of her thoughts, and as she looked wildly around, she realized that the halls had nearly emptied, and she was alone, a long, long way from where she was supposed to be.

In other words, she was late.

“Ohh, darn it!” she squeaked, dashing back the way she’d come.

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“That’s so weird, she was right here…” Nanase marveled, staring at Grace’s empty seat.

Ellen growled in frustration. “I don’t believe it, she was right next to us, how did--…oh, damnit, she was all lost in her head, she must’ve walked right past the classroom!”

“Quiet down back there, Miss Dunkel,” their biology teacher announced, and as Ellen looked up, she saw him closing and locking the door behind him as he did every class; his idea of a good way to cut down on tardiness was apparently to not let anyone in late and get them in all kinds of trouble for an unexcused absence as punishment.

“Wait, Mister Rice, don’t lock up yet, Grace accidentally went past--”

“You know the rules, Miss Dunkel, I don’t allow tardiness in my class!” Mr. Rice said in a disturbingly cheery voice. “Now, back to education!”

Ellen jumped up halfway. “But if I can just--!”

“Sit down, please, Miss Dunkel, we’re starting!”

“But--!”

Will you shut up and sit down?” Nanase hissed.

Ellen stood rigidly in place for another couple of seconds, but eventually forced herself to sit down, gritting her teeth. “Damnit…”

“Now then, everyone,” Mr. Rice announced, “open your books to chapter six, section five, we will be continuing our study on small mammals, and today we move on to reproductive habits…”

“What’s the big deal?” Nanase whispered as the teacher began to lecture.

“I promised I’d stay close to her today…and now she stuck outside by herself…who knows what she’s going to get into out there…”

“She can’t seriously get into that much trouble by herself, can she?”

“…I hope not…”

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“Please don’t lock it please don’t lock it please don’t lock it!” Grace chanted in a mild panic, dashing as fast as she could back to her biology class. Somewhere in the back of her mind she already knew it was a futile effort, she was already a good five minutes late, but nevertheless she had to try…

Unfortunately the back of her mind turned out to be right. As she reached the classroom and grabbed for the knob, it didn’t budge an inch, and when she looked through the little window in the door to plead for Mister Rice’s attention, he gave her little more than half a glance before completely ignoring her.

“Ooohhh, no!” Grace whined quietly, frustrated. For the first time ever, she was late…and it had cost her a whole unexcused absence. Mister Verres wasn’t going to be happy…how was she going to explain this? She’d forgotten to go to class because she was worrying too hard about a few hot boys? Even in her head the conversation was mortifying.

“Now what am I supposed to do…?” Grace mumbled, leaning against the wall. She was missing a whole lesson’s worth of material, how was she going to make it up? She could read the next chapter they were going to read in class anyway, she supposed, but she wasn’t at all sure she’d be able to follow the material on her own; she had so many questions as it was, even WITH the teacher to help explain things…

“Grace?”

Grace darted her head back up to look at the source of the voice, catching the familiar sight of Alex’s smiling face. For the briefest of moments the rational part of her mind started to tense up and freak out, but in a matter of moments, both it and all other thoughts and worries about class and lessons and unexcused absences were wiped blissfully from her mind and she broke out into a wide, goofy smile. “Alex! Hi!”

Sure enough, Alex was standing just a few feet from her, smiling his casual, friendly smile that made her blush from head to toe. “Get locked out of Mister Rice’s class, huh?”

“Hm…?” she murmured, her dreamy mind at first unaware of what he could possibly be talking about, and only after a long moment of brain-addled thought did his words make sense. “Oh, yeah, I, uh…I guess I did.”

“Ouch,” Alex observed. “You’re not going to get in too much trouble with your family, are you?”

“Oh, no, no, don’t worry about that, it’s no big deal, I’ll live,” she quickly insisted, smiling wide and eager to get away from such a silly, meaningless subject. “What are you doing here, Alex?”

“Oh, just wandering, trying to pass the time.”

“Don’t you have class?”

“Yeah, but…heh, I got locked out too,” he admitted with a bit of an embarrassed blush. “Got so into the basketball game last period that I lost track of time.”

“Your teacher does that too?”

“A lot of teachers at this school do, actually. You’d be surprised at how effective it is at keeping people from being late.”

“Hehe…yeah, I bet…” Grace giggled, though she wasn’t quite sure why, he hadn’t said anything particularly funny. Something about him just made her feel giddy inside, and something else that she couldn’t quite put her finger on but made her feel an exciting tingle…

“Well, long as we’re stuck being absent all period, wanna hang out together?” he offered.

“O-oh, yeah, that’d be great!” Grace exclaimed, her cheeks glowing.

“Awesome,” Alex said with a grin. “C’mon, it’s a beautiful day outside. We can take a walk around the school.”

“Anything you want,” Grace said dreamily, practically floating to her feet as she began walking with him, her eyes on him every step they took.

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“…there are some exceptions, of course, but this pattern is largely followed by most small mammals…”

Mister Rice droned on, but Ellen was barely paying attention. Her eyes were locked onto the clock as they had been for the entire forty-five minutes of class so far, her stare urging the hands to move faster and the hands rather stubbornly refusing to do so. In fact they seemed to move slower than ever. Like they were mocking her. Like they knew she had to get out of there and refused to let her, drawing out the last five minutes of class as long as humanly possible.

Damnit, time, move faster! She silently cursed, growling at the clock and grinding her teeth. Grace was out there by herself, unattended…if someone came along and saw her in her state, who knew what could happen?

No, no, that was an exaggeration, she tried to calm herself. She was being paranoid. Grace wasn’t going to go totally off the deep end with a complete stranger. At least she didn’t think so.

But then if Alex came along…

“Are you even slightly paying attention?” Nanase whispered. “Because you’re not borrowing my notes if you’re not even trying.”

“I’m freaked out about Grace, damnit…” Ellen whispered back.

“Will you drop that already? She’s fine.”

“I will not drop it until I figure out what’s wrong with her…”

“Ugh, you’re hopeless sometimes…” Nanase muttered and looked back at the teacher.

“…so to summarize, this cycle usually begins to take root in late winter, although it has been known to extend into early spring as well…”

Ellen ignored Mister Rice’s drone, eyes locked on the minute hand. He had to stop talking soon. The clock had to move. It had to tick off five more minutes. Now four. Now three and a half.

“…instinct usually triggers shortly after the hibernation period most mammals go through to survive the cold winters…”

The teacher really needed to shut up. She had to get out of the room. She had to get to Grace. She had to make sure the girl was okay and not doing something incredibly stupid with Alex. She had to get Grace home, sit her down in a chair, and not let her leave until they’d talked out every detail of this problem and they got to the bottom of it; partly out of her own morbid curiosity, and partly for Tedd and Grace’s own sakes, but mostly because she was not going to break her promise any further than it already had been.

“…affected species go into a period of heat, the instinctual desire to reproduce moving to the forefront of their brains…”

The only thing she couldn’t figure out was why. Grace was naïve but she wasn’t socially inept, or stupid. She knew the difference between thinking someone was cute and being legitimately attracted to them. This wasn’t just thinking boys besides Tedd were cute. She was seriously attracted to them. All of them. That was the real mystery. No one thought everyone was attractive; people had preferences, ideals, turn-ons and turn-offs.

Ellen blinked a bit. Turn-ons… she thought again. Is that it? Was she getting turned on by the guys she was seeing? Yes, it very well could be, Ellen reasoned. By Grace’s own admission, she never thought much about the physical part of a relationship. And her naivety could certainly extend to the workings of sex and physical attraction and arousal. And if that was the case then of course she would be freaked out a little by feelings like that…

But even then, this seemed way stronger than what should be natural. And it didn’t explain why she suddenly started having these feelings at all, or why she was being affected this way at the sight of just about any male, or why she became especially different around Alex in particular…no, no, it couldn’t be as simple as that…

“…reproductive habits can be seen in almost all small mammals, from cats and dogs to chipmunks and squirrels…”

Ugh, that guy is really distracting, Ellen muttered inside her head. I don’t want to hear about your stupid squirrel sex, you loon…

And abruptly Ellen froze. Wait a second…squirrels…

“These mammals during this time of year are compelled by the most powerful, basic instinct to reproduce as much as possible, often focusing most prominently on the more capable-looking mates, in order to help ensure the passing of good genes…”

Suddenly Ellen was paying rigid, rapt attention.

“…these reproductive instincts are not only among the most powerful instincts these mammals have, but also are theorized to be extremely difficult, if not impossible to control or resist. This may be largely due to a lack of nurture against this particular nature among non-human mammals, but whatever the reason, while in heat, these mammals will be driven to seek out the best and most capable-looking mates and…”

Ellen’s jaw dropped in shock. Ohhh, sh--

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

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“…so I ended up having to totally improvise the play because my linemen weren’t in proper position, and I see like five guys coming right at me…”

“Uh-huh…?” Grace murmured dreamily.

“So I go scrambling backward about ten yards, and I can hear coach screaming at me that I should have just dropped on the ball, but somehow I got around the guys and got it all back before I get hit in the shoulder and I go flying out of bounds right across the first down line!”

“Wow…” Grace marveled, looking at him in awe. “You must be like the best player on the team…”

“Oh, I don’t know about that…” he replied modestly, scuffing the ground with his foot.

“You must be, if you saved lots of plays like that…” Grace countered, smiling wide as she scooted a bit closer to him. The two of them had walked around the entire school at least three, maybe four times; Grace hadn’t really been counting, and she was only distantly aware that they were now leaning side by side against a shaded wall of the school facing the parking lot. She’d been much more concerned with nearly every word Alex had to say, and yet at the same time she hadn’t listened to half of them because of how her eyes kept locking onto his sturdy, athletic features and his good-looking face and his wonderful smile full of perfect teeth…it did a very good job of drowning out that silly, nagging voice in the back of her head that seemed to think admiring Alex was a bad idea. What nonsense, Alex was a wonderful, perfect person, an ideal partner…

“Ah, well, thanks, Grace…” he finally answered, smiling that smile again. “I’m still not sure about best, but I’m flattered you think so…”

“You totally are…I mean, everything about you is…perfect…” she murmured, and suddenly it seemed like a very good idea to move closer to him, until they were shoulder to shoulder. And as though it were a match being struck, her body started filling with a tingling warmth.

Alex didn’t fail to notice, blushing slightly at the contact. “Ah…heh…c’mon, perfect? That’s a little much…”

“I don’t think so…” Grace cooed, and now her body was getting quite warm and Alex’s looked so very cool and inviting, like she could just press herself against it and quench the sudden heat she was feeling…

Alex looked at her oddly, and for some reason he seemed to be getting nervous. “Um…listen, Grace, uh…”

“Yes…?” she murmured back, and suddenly she was leaning her weight against him, pressing him to the wall, and it felt so nice, so pleasant and satisfying…and yet somehow not enough…she could still feel the heat, and it was quickly flaring, like a flame to dry timber; it needed a release, something to quench it, and beneath his nervous eyes she noticed very attractive-looking lips…

Distantly she heard Alex cough, felt him put his hands on her shoulders. “Grace, I…think I see where you’re going with this, and I’m…really flattered, really…but, um…”

Grace had stopped paying attention, though. Suddenly, the only thought that seemed to be in her mind was how badly she wanted to kiss him. And without warning she surged forward and did exactly that. She heard Alex give a loud, muffled yelp of surprise, felt him starting to push on her shoulders, but she didn’t budge an inch, because the rush of sensations filling her now as she pressed their lips together were incredible; her heart was racing, her mind was blissfully blank, the heat in her body flared up into a sudden, intense fireball. The sensations were like a flood, an addictive drug that completely consumed her…she needed to keep feeling them, she had to keep kissing him…nothing and no one else in the world seemed to exist…

…and so it went completely unnoticed to her when a car pulled into the parking lot and slowed to a stop near them, its driver freezing for just a moment as he saw the pair, before he hid his suddenly wet eyes behind enormous glasses and sped out of the parking lot without so much as a backwards glance.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Atashi-Cloud on Tue Jun 24, 2008 10:15 am

glad to see such an update.^^;

amazingly great chapter, leaves a lot of suspense at the end for all of us to desire the next chapter...keep writing! ^^;; the biology tie-in was awesome, very great way to drop the not-so-subtle way that Grace is acting upon the readers.^^
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Postby Amon Star on Tue Jun 24, 2008 1:46 pm

Indeed, that was well worth the wait. And before someone else does it...

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Nasrudith on Tue Jun 24, 2008 2:38 pm

Yay for updates! Now that definitely cannot be good for Tedd's psyche. I think he'll end up out angsting Sister II Susan Now this raises some interesting questions that I hope will be addressed in some way. Namely about if it has happened at any time before like in the nest and if not why did it happen now and not in the past. I'm hoping for the later to be true.

The possibilities then would be quite disturbing as it would mean Grace being very attracted to Damien or her brothers. The scary part is that her brothers would be the lesser of two evils which isn't quite as bad as they're not blood relatives (with the exception of Vlad) and they're also not Damien. :o I'm also going to make the merciful and plausible assumption that heat doesn't start into late puberty to spare myself even worse mental images. Gah too late! :o
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Helseth on Tue Jun 24, 2008 4:37 pm

hurrah for updates!

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby CidGregor on Wed Jun 25, 2008 3:09 pm

Heh, glad everybody likes this!

There is probably only two chapters left, so stay tuned, we're closing in on our conclusion!
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby CidGregor on Fri Jul 18, 2008 11:28 am

Basic Instinct

Chapter Nine: What a Squirrel Wants


“Where are you where are you where are you where are you…?!” Ellen chanted under her breath, darting down the halls of the school and stopping in every bathroom, open classroom and empty hallway she could, desperate to find Grace. She’d hoped that the girl had patiently waited right outside the biology classroom so they could meet up again, but obviously that hadn’t happened. Grace was nowhere in sight, and that didn’t sit well with Ellen at all. If Grace ended up running into Alex and went off with him because she hadn’t been there to keep her promise…

God, how could she have been so stupid? The obvious answer had been right there in biology class the entire time. It fit perfectly, right down to the last little detail. If only she’d paid more attention…

No, Ellen told herself with a sharp shake of her head. She couldn’t think that way yet. The most important thing at that moment was to make she the girl was okay, separate her from Alex if necessary, and get her home without any further incident. There would be plenty of time to feel guilty once she found Grace.

IF she found Grace.

Ellen bolted outside, her eyes sweeping over the small mob of people climbing onto the school buses, but there was no sign of Grace there. Her gaze darted to the parking lot next, hoping perhaps she was waiting by the car ready to go home, or at the very least walking to Alex’s car with him…but no, she wasn’t there, either.

Wait a second, what about Tedd... she suddenly remembered. He was going to come and pick her up…

Her eyes did another quick search, and this time, with a rush of relief, she noticed Elliot’s car just beside the buses, and Tedd’s purple-haired face behind the wheel. Her relief quickly evaporated, though, when she jogged closer and saw the tortured expression on his face, as he stared at something. And as Ellen followed his stare, her relief vanished completely, to be replaced by sheer horror at the sight that greeted her.

Grace and Alex stood together against the nearest wall of the school, leaning heavily against it. Or at least Alex was. Grace was leaning rather heavily on HIM. In fact it looked like she was practically trying to lay on top of him, the way she was grinding her body up against him and wrapping her arms around him. But the worst part of it by far was the almost sickening image of Grace furiously kissing Alex, shameless and uninhibited and, from Ellen’s point of view, open-mouthed.

“Oh dear god I’m going to hurl…” Ellen murmured, holding her stomach.

SCREEEEEEEEEEEECHHH!

Ellen nearly jumped out of her skin at the sound, and her nose curled at the foul odor of burning rubber that followed right behind it. She whirled to look toward the dual affront to her senses, and saw Elliot’s car in motion, a broken-looking Tedd driving it away from the sight as fast as he could.

“Oh no, no, no, no, NO, DAMNIT!” Ellen shouted in frustration, but it did no good. He was already gone.

Great. Now she REALLY felt bad.

Ellen growled and clenched her fists, spinning back to glare at the lip-locked couple. Obviously this was the sight that had driven Tedd away, and Ellen couldn’t say she blamed him. Grace had just created a veritable laundry list of problems to pile on top of her existing ones, and Ellen was suddenly determined to stop the bleeding. It was time to start fixing things, and the travesty before her was the first thing on the list. She stomped up behind the pair, lifting her arms and opening her mouth, but before she could do a thing with either of them, Grace was pushed away from Alex’s body, landing in Ellen’s waiting, and surprised, arms.

“I said NO!” Alex blurted out as he shoved her, gasping for breath and looking around wildly.

“Whoa! What the hell?!” Ellen shouted, catching her, and glaring at Alex. “What was that for?!”

Alex, though, again to her complete surprise, looked more awkward and embarrassed than Ellen thought was possible, looking apologetically at Ellen for just a moment before looking around them again, as though searching for anyone who might have seen. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to be that rough, but I didn’t know what else to DO, she was all over me!”

“What, suddenly you grew a conscience?” Ellen snarled slightly, not letting herself be fazed by his odd reactions. “The hell is wrong with you, hitting on a girl with a boyfriend?!”

“She has a boyfriend?!” Alex echoed as he suddenly stared at her again, clearly shocked. “She never mentioned a boyfriend!”

“……” Ellen’s jaw dropped slightly, her gaze turning on Grace now. “You didn’t tell him about Tedd?!”

“Mmm…who’s Tedd…?” was her dreamy response, her eyes focused on Alex.

“……” Ellen’s eyes became as big as saucers. “Ex-CUSE me?!”

“Do you mind…?” she murmured, looking right past her at Alex again. “I was enjoying that kiss…even if he is playing hard to get…hehe…”

Ellen’s jaw was practically to the pavement by now. “Okay, you have officially gone COMPLETELY off the deep end. I am taking you home, NOW.”

“Hey, wait a minute, will someone explain to me what’s going on here?” Alex nearly demanded. “One second I’m hanging out with someone I think is a nice new friend and the next second she’s trying to…make out with me!”

“Like you were complaining,” Ellen growled, hoisting Grace up.

“Yes, as a matter of fact, I was!” Alex countered. “I tried to tell her I wasn’t interested in her like that, but she wouldn’t listen! If my boyfriend saw that, he’s going to flip!”

“Oh, please, you’d have to be gay to not want Gra--” Ellen froze mid-speech. “…I’m sorry, did…did you say…your boyfriend?”

“……” Alex reddened for a brief moment. “…I, uh…um…whoops…”

“…Whoa. You ARE ga--”

“Shh! Not so loud!” he shushed her, looking around conspiratorially. “Oh man, I hope no one heard that…”

“…So wait, all this time, you weren’t, like, hitting on her?” Ellen marveled.

“No, of course not. I was just trying to make a friend, and I thought she was doing the same thing,” Alex insisted. “Jeez, can’t a guy be nice to a girl without being accused of hitting on her or getting hit on BY her?”

“……” Ellen stared at him in shock, and part of her wanted to probe further, but she shook it off after a moment. Grace had to come first. She could worry about getting his side of the story later. “Listen, um…Alex…I really, really hate to run off right now, but I need to deal with Grace, she’s…um…she’s going through a weird time, it’s a long story, and I don’t know exactly how to explain it. But I’m sorry she caused you trouble.”

Alex sighed and rubbed his forehead, but eventually nodded. “It’s alright…just, uh…don’t say anything about…”

“I won’t,” she promised, and with a quick wave goodbye she dragged Grace away from him toward the parking lot.

“Heyyy, what’re you doing? I wanna be with Alex…” Grace whined, sounding completely unlike herself.

“Grace, I love you and all…but shut up,” Ellen ordered, hauling her into the car.

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By the time Ellen had gotten her back to the Dunkel residence, Grace had returned to her right state of mind again. Ellen, however, would have almost preferred she was still lost in fantasy land, because the moment she realized what she’d done, she broke down into hysterics and began crying into Ellen’s shoulder, and hadn’t stopped for the last half-hour.

“Um…there, there…” Ellen tried awkwardly to comfort her as they sat on the living room couch. “It’s gonna be okay…”

“No it won’t…it won’t ever be okay…!” Grace wailed. “I KISSED him! I KISSED ALEX! Why did I DO that?!”

Ellen cleared her throat. “Yeah, um, Grace, about that, I think there’s something you need to--”

“Oh God, what’s WRONG with me?!” Grace cut her off with another sob. “I just completely lost control, I didn’t even CARE for a minute, I…!”

“Yeah, I know, Grace, just listen for a second, you’re--”

“I felt like I wanted…like I wanted to--!”

“I know!” Ellen shouted, stopping her. “…I know.”

“You do…?”

“Yeah. You wanted to have sex with him, didn’t you?”

Grace jolted, partly from the unpleasant reality of Ellen’s words, and partly in surprise that she had figured it out. “How did you know…?”

“…Grace, I think I’ve found out what’s been happening to you lately,” Ellen began.

“You have?!” Grace nearly burst out, wiping roughly at her tears. “Tell me, please! Whatever it is, tell me, so I can get rid of it!”

“…Uhhm…see, that’s the thing…I don’t think you CAN get rid of it.”

“Wh…what?! Why not?!”

“Well, because…you see…well, if it’s what I think it is, anyway…you wouldn’t be able to get rid of it because it’s kinda sorta ingrained into your DNA…”

“My DNA is making me cheat on Tedd?!”

Ellen reddened a bit. ‘N-not exactly. It’s more like…”

“Like what?!”

Ellen reddened even further. “…Grace, I think…I think you might be in heat.”

“……” Grace stared blankly for a moment, the words apparently meaningless to her. “In heat…? You mean like…I’m getting too much sun?”

“…No, um…y’see…”

Grace squeezed Ellen’s shoulder. “Ellen, you gotta tell me…I want to know…”

“……” Ellen sighed, and nodded resignedly. “Okay, but you’re not going to like it…”

“It’s not like I don’t deserve it, after what I did…” Grace murmured dejectedly.

“No, Grace, don’t say that…”

“It’s the truth…”

“No, it’s not!” Ellen insisted. “That’s just it, Grace…what’s been happening to you is totally out of your control!”

“…H-huh…?”

“See…we learned something new in biology class today…we were talking about how smaller mammals reproduce, and well…”

“Yeah…?” Grace probed.

“…Most of them have this…cycle…where they get a super-powerful urge to…well…have sex.”

“……” Grace’s eyes widened a bit. “Wh…why?”

“So they can have babies, basically. It’s all part of the whole circle of life thing. Ensure the survival of the species an’ stuff.”

“…Aww…” Grace managed to coo, warmed just slightly by the thought of little baby animals.

“Yeah, so…basically they get that instinct, and it’s called being in heat, and it happens to a lot of small mammals…including squirrels.”

It was then that Grace started to get it. “S…squirrels…?”

“Yeah…and since you’ve got some squirrel DNA…I figured that’s what was happening to you. Because, see, it’s supposed to be this really super-strong instinct that they can’t really control, it just makes them look for the best-looking ‘mates’ and, uh…y’know…makes them wanna…”

Grace was pale as a ghost by now, staring blankly at Ellen. “My DNA is making me want to run out and…and do…dirty things with Alex because he LOOKS GOOD?! So I can have babies?!”

“…Basically, yeah, if my guess is right…and since you were focusing a lot on good-looking guys like Alex, I figured those instincts were probably tellin’ ya it’d be a really good idea to, uh…y’know, um…get some lovin’ on with him…and uh…that’s how I knew…” Ellen finished, blushing horribly by contrast.

“……” Grace fell silent, turning to stare blankly off into space, as though she’d gone numb. But at least she wasn’t crying anymore, Ellen thought, and that was surely a plus.

“…Grace?” Ellen tried.

“…So that’s why…why I felt so attracted to all the guys?” Grace asked. “Why Tedd and Elliot and Justin all felt really attractive? Why I…kissed Alex…?”

“…Well, it was kinda way past a kiss by the time I got there, but…yeah, basically,” Ellen said.

“Ohh God, I can’t believe I did that…” Grace moaned pitiably, burying her face in her hands. “What’s Alex going to think of me now…? He probably thinks I’m insane…ohh, and how am I gonna tell Tedd…?”

Ellen felt a jab of guilt at those words. “Uhh…about that…um…Tedd kind of…saw you.”

Grace twitched violently, whirling on her. “He what?!”

“Yeah…I’d talked to him earlier and told him maybe it would be a good idea for you guys to spend some time together instead of with Alex, and he was coming to pick you up, but then he saw that and…well…” Ellen trailed off, wincing.

“Ohh God, this is the worst day EVER…!”

“I’m sorry, Grace…I thought it would be a good idea, it just…backfired…”

Grace hung her head again, looking about ready to collapse into renewed tears, but she held them back, resolved to just sniffling now.

“…Are you…gonna be okay?” Ellen asked after a few moments.

“…I don’t know…” Grace murmured. “Tedd saw me kiss another boy…he must HATE me now…”

“Oh, come on, I’m sure he doesn’t HATE you…”

“After what he saw, he probably thinks I want to…break up…”

“Grace, come on, be reasonable…if you just explain everything to him, he’ll understand…”

“It doesn’t matter…even if he doesn’t hate me now, he probably will soon,” Grace countered with another sniffle. “If…if what you’re saying about my DNA is true, then…what am I supposed to do about it? It’s been getting worse and worse every day. How can I even trust myself to go outside if I’m just going to pounce all over any boy that I see…?”

“I…I don’t know. I wish I had an answer, Grace, but I just don’t know enough about the subject. I don’t know how to make a natural, basic instinct just go away…”

Ellen looked down in defeat as she spoke, but Grace on the other hand seemed to gain a sudden concentration at her words, as though something had hit her.

“Grace…?”

“…natural instincts…” she murmured, dawning comprehension growing across her face as she jumped to her feet. “I…I have to see Tedd…”

Ellen blinked in surprise. “…Right now?”

“Yes…right now…he deserves to know the truth…”

“……” Ellen nodded. “Yeah…that’s a good idea. Better talk it out ASAP then wait around until it gets really bad…”

“Thanks, Ellen…I don’t know what I would’ve done without you today…”

Ellen shook her head, guilt returning to her quickly. “Don’t say that. I’m the whole reason this mess got this far. I wasn’t paying attention and let you walk off and miss class…if you’d been there we could have figured this out together right then and there, and that stupid kiss never would’ve happened…I’m sorry, Grace, it’s all my fault…I broke my promise…”

“None of this mess is your fault, Ellen,” Grace assured her. “It’s all MY weird DNA…there was no way you could’ve known.”

“But still, I--”

“No, Ellen,” Grace said firmly. “Don’t blame yourself. I never should have put the burden on you. This is MY problem, and darn it, I’m gonna go FIX it!”

“Fix it? Fix it how?” Ellen echoed. “You can’t just make instincts like that go away…”

“Maybe not…or maybe I can. I have an idea.”

“…what kind of idea?”

“…I’ll tell you later. If it works…” Grace murmured.

Ellen searched her expression for some hint of what the other girl was planning, but found nothing. Which seriously worried her. “…Grace, are you sure you know what you’re doing…?” she probed, her curiosity unwilling to be suppressed.

“I hope so…” Grace said, far from convincingly, and was out the door before Ellen could say another word.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Amon Star on Fri Jul 18, 2008 11:56 am

Ooh, nearly done, a? I wonder what Grace is planning? I bet it involves the CMD somehow.

Oh, and for the record Ellen, you don't have to be gay to object to a girl throwing themselves at you. You of all people should know that.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Atashi-Cloud on Fri Jul 18, 2008 12:47 pm

can't wait for the next(and possibly last) chapter to go up.^^; this has been a great read thus far.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Nasrudith on Sat Jul 19, 2008 9:51 pm

I have a strong feeling that this plan will end up with her throwing herself at a very upset Tedd. Which likely wouldn't end well at all....
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Helseth on Sat Jul 19, 2008 11:51 pm

Everything i have to say has already been said so

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