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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby CidGregor on Wed Apr 23, 2008 10:39 pm

Heh, it's always a challenge to handle sexuality in a tasteful and non-pornographic manner, isn't it? :wink: And we're not through yet.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby Nasrudith on Thu Apr 24, 2008 9:13 am

Yay for updates! I'm waitng for the next installment. Now Tedd and Grace alone in Elliot's car, that can't end well.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby CidGregor on Thu Apr 24, 2008 1:09 pm

Assuming they GET that far. :wink:
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED APRIL 21ST!

Postby Nasrudith on Thu Apr 24, 2008 11:16 pm

CidGregor wrote:Assuming they GET that far. :wink:


Yeah I guess on top of the car would be just as bad or worse. :D
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby CidGregor on Tue Jun 24, 2008 9:11 am

Notes: Bleh, didn't mean for this one to take two months, but it also went though quite a few revisions and edits before it felt right, which was way more important this time because it's a fairly pivotal chapter. It's also nearly 4,000 words long, so at least you're getting a real bang for your buck! Hope y'all enjoy, we're in sight of the finish line.

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Basic Instinct

Chapter Eight: Flirting with Disaster


“I’m telling you, she’s gone completely off the deep end.”

“She’s got a crush. It happens. She’ll get past it.”

“This is SO not just a crush, she’s going completely head over heels…”

“She is not, quit exaggerating.”

“Aren’t you supposed to be on MY side here?”

“I don’t want to get involved in stuff that’s not my business.”

“But this could totally doom Tedd and Grace’s relationship forever!”

“C’mon, Ellen, you’re overreacting,” Nanase almost snapped. “It can’t be that bad.”

“I’m telling you it is!” Ellen hissed in a harsh whisper. “And keep your voice down!” she added with a quick glance in Grace’s direction.

Nanase lowered her voice, but rolled her eyes as well. “If you don’t want her to overhear us talking about her behind her back, maybe we should, y’know, stop.

Ellen frowned, but fell silent for a moment, at least, conceding the point as she looked at Grace again. She was walking beside the other two girls through the usual crowd of students toward their biology class, and as had nearly become the norm for the last week, she was walking with her head down and her expression joyless. Ellen couldn’t remember her smiling once this entire week. Until she came into the company of Alex, of course, and then she was smiling and giggling so much might as well have been wearing a shirt that named her his number one fan. That alone told Ellen this was bad and getting worse, why couldn’t Nanase see it?

“Look, you know it can’t be healthy for her and Tedd, you know how he is. Even if it really is nothing, Tedd will beat himself up over it and get all paranoid and stuff…”

“That’s his problem, not Grace’s,” Nanase said back. “If Tedd’s gonna get jealous because she happens to make a new friend that happens to be male, then that’s what’s not healthy for them.”

“…Well, yeah, okay, but--”

“But what?” Nanase stopped her. “You want to keep her from making any new friends that aren’t girls?”

“Nnnhhh, no, but damnit, Nani, that’s exactly the problem, this isn’t just a ‘friend!’” she hissed again. “She’s crushing on him bad! You haven’t seen it in action, you don’t know…”

“Like I said, so what if she has a crush? People get crushes. You don’t magically stop finding people attractive just because you’re in a committed relationship. They’re natural, they pass.”

“Yeah, but what about when they don’t pass? What about when a crush turns into a seriously crazy attraction and you end up leaving the committed relationship because you’re suddenly all into the new guy?”

“What about it?”

“……” Ellen blinked in surprise. “Huh?”

Nanase looked seriously back at her. “So what if she falls for someone else? Maybe that means her and Tedd aren’t meant for each other. Maybe she’s supposed to be with this Alex guy.”

Ellen stared at her in near-horror. “There is no way you can seriously believe that. Two hours ago you were right there with me wondering what was wrong with her for being attracted to him!”

“I’m just making a point. We’re in high school, Ellen. Relationships come and go every single day. Do you know how rare it is for people to stay together for ANY significant length of time at this age? Tedd and Grace have known each other for a couple of months, that’s not even close to enough time to say they’re absolutely meant for each other. Maybe they’re not even meant to be with anyone right now, for all you know.”

“…What are you saying?”

“I’m saying they’re not magically going to stay together just because YOU think they should,” Nanase said as the two of them turned into their next classroom. “If they’re meant to be together, then this Alex thing will work itself out. If they’re not, then nothing you do is gonna change it.”

Still Ellen stared at her as they sat side by side in their seats. “Okay, I get your point, but still, do you actually believe they’re NOT meant for each other? Honestly?”

“…Honestly, no,” Nanase admitted. “If I had to pick one high school couple I most believed would stay together, it’d be them.”

“And you have to admit the way Grace is acting around Alex is WAY weirder than just a silly little crush that’ll eventually go away.”

Nanase couldn’t help but nod. “Yes, it’s definitely weirder. But Grace isn’t normal to begin with. She’s had like NO prior experience with emotions and environments like this. You can’t expect her to react to it all the same way anyone else would. Maybe she’s just doing a really bad job of handling it.”

“Oh come on, I don’t care what circumstances you grew up in, you don’t start having dirty dreams about people days after meeting them.”

“You can’t control what you dream about! You said so yourself!”

“…Yeah, well, you still don’t turn into an oozing pile of goo at every cute guy you see!”

“Okay, NOW you’re exaggerating.”

“I am SO not! Seriously, you haven’t seen her, it’s nauseating!”

“Would you stop talking about her like that? She’s right there--…hey, where’d she go?”

Ellen froze for a split second, then whirled around to look at Grace’s seat, and to her surprise, it was empty.

“Grace…?”

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

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Somewhere well down the hall from her classroom, Grace was walking alone, legs moving on autopilot and unaware that she’d passed her classroom and left Ellen and Nanase behind, she was so inwardly focused. The general din of the student body around her was background noise at best, and not even the occasional arm or shoulder bumping or brushing against her was bringing her back to the outside world. She was far more concerned with her own problems.

Ellen’s ‘experiment’ in gym class, however much it had been based in good intentions, didn’t make things any better, or bring her any closer to understanding what was happening to her. The same thing that had been happening simply happened again, and stronger than ever. The only thing she’d accomplished was to embarrass herself in front of Ellen and Justin now, too.

Why couldn’t she control this? Where were these horrible urges coming from? Why did they make her stare at every boy she saw? She loved Tedd, she repeated to herself over and over. She loved Tedd, she was attracted to Tedd, she wanted to be with Tedd. She couldn’t be attracted to Justin or Elliot or Alex…she just couldn’t be. They were friends. It was supposed to stay that way. And yet there it was, that ugly voice she hated, worming its way into her mind and reminding her that yes, she was attracted to those boys, at least physically, and it was not something she could just brush aside and ignore.

The really strange thing, although it thankfully gave Grace a much-needed emotional boost, was that Tedd wasn’t excluded from the list. As weird as it was to feel these strange, unsettling attractions for other boys, it wasn’t overwriting her feelings for Tedd. On the contrary, she found Tedd more attractive than ever, in the same physical sense that she was finding the other boys attractive. Everything she felt for him before, she still felt now, except now every time she saw him, or pictured him in her mind, her heart rate seemed to jump and her skin flushed and she became unusually interested in the idea of seeing him without a shirt on. Or pants. Or anything. That in itself was a strange thing for her to come to terms with, and Tedd was her boyfriend. When she started thinking that about Justin and Elliot, and most of all Alex, it was way beyond unsettling…

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

The sound finally jerked Grace’s head up and out of her thoughts, and as she looked wildly around, she realized that the halls had nearly emptied, and she was alone, a long, long way from where she was supposed to be.

In other words, she was late.

“Ohh, darn it!” she squeaked, dashing back the way she’d come.

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“That’s so weird, she was right here…” Nanase marveled, staring at Grace’s empty seat.

Ellen growled in frustration. “I don’t believe it, she was right next to us, how did--…oh, damnit, she was all lost in her head, she must’ve walked right past the classroom!”

“Quiet down back there, Miss Dunkel,” their biology teacher announced, and as Ellen looked up, she saw him closing and locking the door behind him as he did every class; his idea of a good way to cut down on tardiness was apparently to not let anyone in late and get them in all kinds of trouble for an unexcused absence as punishment.

“Wait, Mister Rice, don’t lock up yet, Grace accidentally went past--”

“You know the rules, Miss Dunkel, I don’t allow tardiness in my class!” Mr. Rice said in a disturbingly cheery voice. “Now, back to education!”

Ellen jumped up halfway. “But if I can just--!”

“Sit down, please, Miss Dunkel, we’re starting!”

“But--!”

Will you shut up and sit down?” Nanase hissed.

Ellen stood rigidly in place for another couple of seconds, but eventually forced herself to sit down, gritting her teeth. “Damnit…”

“Now then, everyone,” Mr. Rice announced, “open your books to chapter six, section five, we will be continuing our study on small mammals, and today we move on to reproductive habits…”

“What’s the big deal?” Nanase whispered as the teacher began to lecture.

“I promised I’d stay close to her today…and now she stuck outside by herself…who knows what she’s going to get into out there…”

“She can’t seriously get into that much trouble by herself, can she?”

“…I hope not…”

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“Please don’t lock it please don’t lock it please don’t lock it!” Grace chanted in a mild panic, dashing as fast as she could back to her biology class. Somewhere in the back of her mind she already knew it was a futile effort, she was already a good five minutes late, but nevertheless she had to try…

Unfortunately the back of her mind turned out to be right. As she reached the classroom and grabbed for the knob, it didn’t budge an inch, and when she looked through the little window in the door to plead for Mister Rice’s attention, he gave her little more than half a glance before completely ignoring her.

“Ooohhh, no!” Grace whined quietly, frustrated. For the first time ever, she was late…and it had cost her a whole unexcused absence. Mister Verres wasn’t going to be happy…how was she going to explain this? She’d forgotten to go to class because she was worrying too hard about a few hot boys? Even in her head the conversation was mortifying.

“Now what am I supposed to do…?” Grace mumbled, leaning against the wall. She was missing a whole lesson’s worth of material, how was she going to make it up? She could read the next chapter they were going to read in class anyway, she supposed, but she wasn’t at all sure she’d be able to follow the material on her own; she had so many questions as it was, even WITH the teacher to help explain things…

“Grace?”

Grace darted her head back up to look at the source of the voice, catching the familiar sight of Alex’s smiling face. For the briefest of moments the rational part of her mind started to tense up and freak out, but in a matter of moments, both it and all other thoughts and worries about class and lessons and unexcused absences were wiped blissfully from her mind and she broke out into a wide, goofy smile. “Alex! Hi!”

Sure enough, Alex was standing just a few feet from her, smiling his casual, friendly smile that made her blush from head to toe. “Get locked out of Mister Rice’s class, huh?”

“Hm…?” she murmured, her dreamy mind at first unaware of what he could possibly be talking about, and only after a long moment of brain-addled thought did his words make sense. “Oh, yeah, I, uh…I guess I did.”

“Ouch,” Alex observed. “You’re not going to get in too much trouble with your family, are you?”

“Oh, no, no, don’t worry about that, it’s no big deal, I’ll live,” she quickly insisted, smiling wide and eager to get away from such a silly, meaningless subject. “What are you doing here, Alex?”

“Oh, just wandering, trying to pass the time.”

“Don’t you have class?”

“Yeah, but…heh, I got locked out too,” he admitted with a bit of an embarrassed blush. “Got so into the basketball game last period that I lost track of time.”

“Your teacher does that too?”

“A lot of teachers at this school do, actually. You’d be surprised at how effective it is at keeping people from being late.”

“Hehe…yeah, I bet…” Grace giggled, though she wasn’t quite sure why, he hadn’t said anything particularly funny. Something about him just made her feel giddy inside, and something else that she couldn’t quite put her finger on but made her feel an exciting tingle…

“Well, long as we’re stuck being absent all period, wanna hang out together?” he offered.

“O-oh, yeah, that’d be great!” Grace exclaimed, her cheeks glowing.

“Awesome,” Alex said with a grin. “C’mon, it’s a beautiful day outside. We can take a walk around the school.”

“Anything you want,” Grace said dreamily, practically floating to her feet as she began walking with him, her eyes on him every step they took.

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“…there are some exceptions, of course, but this pattern is largely followed by most small mammals…”

Mister Rice droned on, but Ellen was barely paying attention. Her eyes were locked onto the clock as they had been for the entire forty-five minutes of class so far, her stare urging the hands to move faster and the hands rather stubbornly refusing to do so. In fact they seemed to move slower than ever. Like they were mocking her. Like they knew she had to get out of there and refused to let her, drawing out the last five minutes of class as long as humanly possible.

Damnit, time, move faster! She silently cursed, growling at the clock and grinding her teeth. Grace was out there by herself, unattended…if someone came along and saw her in her state, who knew what could happen?

No, no, that was an exaggeration, she tried to calm herself. She was being paranoid. Grace wasn’t going to go totally off the deep end with a complete stranger. At least she didn’t think so.

But then if Alex came along…

“Are you even slightly paying attention?” Nanase whispered. “Because you’re not borrowing my notes if you’re not even trying.”

“I’m freaked out about Grace, damnit…” Ellen whispered back.

“Will you drop that already? She’s fine.”

“I will not drop it until I figure out what’s wrong with her…”

“Ugh, you’re hopeless sometimes…” Nanase muttered and looked back at the teacher.

“…so to summarize, this cycle usually begins to take root in late winter, although it has been known to extend into early spring as well…”

Ellen ignored Mister Rice’s drone, eyes locked on the minute hand. He had to stop talking soon. The clock had to move. It had to tick off five more minutes. Now four. Now three and a half.

“…instinct usually triggers shortly after the hibernation period most mammals go through to survive the cold winters…”

The teacher really needed to shut up. She had to get out of the room. She had to get to Grace. She had to make sure the girl was okay and not doing something incredibly stupid with Alex. She had to get Grace home, sit her down in a chair, and not let her leave until they’d talked out every detail of this problem and they got to the bottom of it; partly out of her own morbid curiosity, and partly for Tedd and Grace’s own sakes, but mostly because she was not going to break her promise any further than it already had been.

“…affected species go into a period of heat, the instinctual desire to reproduce moving to the forefront of their brains…”

The only thing she couldn’t figure out was why. Grace was naïve but she wasn’t socially inept, or stupid. She knew the difference between thinking someone was cute and being legitimately attracted to them. This wasn’t just thinking boys besides Tedd were cute. She was seriously attracted to them. All of them. That was the real mystery. No one thought everyone was attractive; people had preferences, ideals, turn-ons and turn-offs.

Ellen blinked a bit. Turn-ons… she thought again. Is that it? Was she getting turned on by the guys she was seeing? Yes, it very well could be, Ellen reasoned. By Grace’s own admission, she never thought much about the physical part of a relationship. And her naivety could certainly extend to the workings of sex and physical attraction and arousal. And if that was the case then of course she would be freaked out a little by feelings like that…

But even then, this seemed way stronger than what should be natural. And it didn’t explain why she suddenly started having these feelings at all, or why she was being affected this way at the sight of just about any male, or why she became especially different around Alex in particular…no, no, it couldn’t be as simple as that…

“…reproductive habits can be seen in almost all small mammals, from cats and dogs to chipmunks and squirrels…”

Ugh, that guy is really distracting, Ellen muttered inside her head. I don’t want to hear about your stupid squirrel sex, you loon…

And abruptly Ellen froze. Wait a second…squirrels…

“These mammals during this time of year are compelled by the most powerful, basic instinct to reproduce as much as possible, often focusing most prominently on the more capable-looking mates, in order to help ensure the passing of good genes…”

Suddenly Ellen was paying rigid, rapt attention.

“…these reproductive instincts are not only among the most powerful instincts these mammals have, but also are theorized to be extremely difficult, if not impossible to control or resist. This may be largely due to a lack of nurture against this particular nature among non-human mammals, but whatever the reason, while in heat, these mammals will be driven to seek out the best and most capable-looking mates and…”

Ellen’s jaw dropped in shock. Ohhh, sh--

BRRRRIIIIIIIIING!

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“…so I ended up having to totally improvise the play because my linemen weren’t in proper position, and I see like five guys coming right at me…”

“Uh-huh…?” Grace murmured dreamily.

“So I go scrambling backward about ten yards, and I can hear coach screaming at me that I should have just dropped on the ball, but somehow I got around the guys and got it all back before I get hit in the shoulder and I go flying out of bounds right across the first down line!”

“Wow…” Grace marveled, looking at him in awe. “You must be like the best player on the team…”

“Oh, I don’t know about that…” he replied modestly, scuffing the ground with his foot.

“You must be, if you saved lots of plays like that…” Grace countered, smiling wide as she scooted a bit closer to him. The two of them had walked around the entire school at least three, maybe four times; Grace hadn’t really been counting, and she was only distantly aware that they were now leaning side by side against a shaded wall of the school facing the parking lot. She’d been much more concerned with nearly every word Alex had to say, and yet at the same time she hadn’t listened to half of them because of how her eyes kept locking onto his sturdy, athletic features and his good-looking face and his wonderful smile full of perfect teeth…it did a very good job of drowning out that silly, nagging voice in the back of her head that seemed to think admiring Alex was a bad idea. What nonsense, Alex was a wonderful, perfect person, an ideal partner…

“Ah, well, thanks, Grace…” he finally answered, smiling that smile again. “I’m still not sure about best, but I’m flattered you think so…”

“You totally are…I mean, everything about you is…perfect…” she murmured, and suddenly it seemed like a very good idea to move closer to him, until they were shoulder to shoulder. And as though it were a match being struck, her body started filling with a tingling warmth.

Alex didn’t fail to notice, blushing slightly at the contact. “Ah…heh…c’mon, perfect? That’s a little much…”

“I don’t think so…” Grace cooed, and now her body was getting quite warm and Alex’s looked so very cool and inviting, like she could just press herself against it and quench the sudden heat she was feeling…

Alex looked at her oddly, and for some reason he seemed to be getting nervous. “Um…listen, Grace, uh…”

“Yes…?” she murmured back, and suddenly she was leaning her weight against him, pressing him to the wall, and it felt so nice, so pleasant and satisfying…and yet somehow not enough…she could still feel the heat, and it was quickly flaring, like a flame to dry timber; it needed a release, something to quench it, and beneath his nervous eyes she noticed very attractive-looking lips…

Distantly she heard Alex cough, felt him put his hands on her shoulders. “Grace, I…think I see where you’re going with this, and I’m…really flattered, really…but, um…”

Grace had stopped paying attention, though. Suddenly, the only thought that seemed to be in her mind was how badly she wanted to kiss him. And without warning she surged forward and did exactly that. She heard Alex give a loud, muffled yelp of surprise, felt him starting to push on her shoulders, but she didn’t budge an inch, because the rush of sensations filling her now as she pressed their lips together were incredible; her heart was racing, her mind was blissfully blank, the heat in her body flared up into a sudden, intense fireball. The sensations were like a flood, an addictive drug that completely consumed her…she needed to keep feeling them, she had to keep kissing him…nothing and no one else in the world seemed to exist…

…and so it went completely unnoticed to her when a car pulled into the parking lot and slowed to a stop near them, its driver freezing for just a moment as he saw the pair, before he hid his suddenly wet eyes behind enormous glasses and sped out of the parking lot without so much as a backwards glance.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Atashi-Cloud on Tue Jun 24, 2008 10:15 am

glad to see such an update.^^;

amazingly great chapter, leaves a lot of suspense at the end for all of us to desire the next chapter...keep writing! ^^;; the biology tie-in was awesome, very great way to drop the not-so-subtle way that Grace is acting upon the readers.^^
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Amon Star on Tue Jun 24, 2008 1:46 pm

Indeed, that was well worth the wait. And before someone else does it...

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Nasrudith on Tue Jun 24, 2008 2:38 pm

Yay for updates! Now that definitely cannot be good for Tedd's psyche. I think he'll end up out angsting Sister II Susan Now this raises some interesting questions that I hope will be addressed in some way. Namely about if it has happened at any time before like in the nest and if not why did it happen now and not in the past. I'm hoping for the later to be true.

The possibilities then would be quite disturbing as it would mean Grace being very attracted to Damien or her brothers. The scary part is that her brothers would be the lesser of two evils which isn't quite as bad as they're not blood relatives (with the exception of Vlad) and they're also not Damien. :o I'm also going to make the merciful and plausible assumption that heat doesn't start into late puberty to spare myself even worse mental images. Gah too late! :o
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby Helseth on Tue Jun 24, 2008 4:37 pm

hurrah for updates!

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JUNE 24TH!

Postby CidGregor on Wed Jun 25, 2008 3:09 pm

Heh, glad everybody likes this!

There is probably only two chapters left, so stay tuned, we're closing in on our conclusion!
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby CidGregor on Fri Jul 18, 2008 11:28 am

Basic Instinct

Chapter Nine: What a Squirrel Wants


“Where are you where are you where are you where are you…?!” Ellen chanted under her breath, darting down the halls of the school and stopping in every bathroom, open classroom and empty hallway she could, desperate to find Grace. She’d hoped that the girl had patiently waited right outside the biology classroom so they could meet up again, but obviously that hadn’t happened. Grace was nowhere in sight, and that didn’t sit well with Ellen at all. If Grace ended up running into Alex and went off with him because she hadn’t been there to keep her promise…

God, how could she have been so stupid? The obvious answer had been right there in biology class the entire time. It fit perfectly, right down to the last little detail. If only she’d paid more attention…

No, Ellen told herself with a sharp shake of her head. She couldn’t think that way yet. The most important thing at that moment was to make she the girl was okay, separate her from Alex if necessary, and get her home without any further incident. There would be plenty of time to feel guilty once she found Grace.

IF she found Grace.

Ellen bolted outside, her eyes sweeping over the small mob of people climbing onto the school buses, but there was no sign of Grace there. Her gaze darted to the parking lot next, hoping perhaps she was waiting by the car ready to go home, or at the very least walking to Alex’s car with him…but no, she wasn’t there, either.

Wait a second, what about Tedd... she suddenly remembered. He was going to come and pick her up…

Her eyes did another quick search, and this time, with a rush of relief, she noticed Elliot’s car just beside the buses, and Tedd’s purple-haired face behind the wheel. Her relief quickly evaporated, though, when she jogged closer and saw the tortured expression on his face, as he stared at something. And as Ellen followed his stare, her relief vanished completely, to be replaced by sheer horror at the sight that greeted her.

Grace and Alex stood together against the nearest wall of the school, leaning heavily against it. Or at least Alex was. Grace was leaning rather heavily on HIM. In fact it looked like she was practically trying to lay on top of him, the way she was grinding her body up against him and wrapping her arms around him. But the worst part of it by far was the almost sickening image of Grace furiously kissing Alex, shameless and uninhibited and, from Ellen’s point of view, open-mouthed.

“Oh dear god I’m going to hurl…” Ellen murmured, holding her stomach.

SCREEEEEEEEEEEECHHH!

Ellen nearly jumped out of her skin at the sound, and her nose curled at the foul odor of burning rubber that followed right behind it. She whirled to look toward the dual affront to her senses, and saw Elliot’s car in motion, a broken-looking Tedd driving it away from the sight as fast as he could.

“Oh no, no, no, no, NO, DAMNIT!” Ellen shouted in frustration, but it did no good. He was already gone.

Great. Now she REALLY felt bad.

Ellen growled and clenched her fists, spinning back to glare at the lip-locked couple. Obviously this was the sight that had driven Tedd away, and Ellen couldn’t say she blamed him. Grace had just created a veritable laundry list of problems to pile on top of her existing ones, and Ellen was suddenly determined to stop the bleeding. It was time to start fixing things, and the travesty before her was the first thing on the list. She stomped up behind the pair, lifting her arms and opening her mouth, but before she could do a thing with either of them, Grace was pushed away from Alex’s body, landing in Ellen’s waiting, and surprised, arms.

“I said NO!” Alex blurted out as he shoved her, gasping for breath and looking around wildly.

“Whoa! What the hell?!” Ellen shouted, catching her, and glaring at Alex. “What was that for?!”

Alex, though, again to her complete surprise, looked more awkward and embarrassed than Ellen thought was possible, looking apologetically at Ellen for just a moment before looking around them again, as though searching for anyone who might have seen. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to be that rough, but I didn’t know what else to DO, she was all over me!”

“What, suddenly you grew a conscience?” Ellen snarled slightly, not letting herself be fazed by his odd reactions. “The hell is wrong with you, hitting on a girl with a boyfriend?!”

“She has a boyfriend?!” Alex echoed as he suddenly stared at her again, clearly shocked. “She never mentioned a boyfriend!”

“……” Ellen’s jaw dropped slightly, her gaze turning on Grace now. “You didn’t tell him about Tedd?!”

“Mmm…who’s Tedd…?” was her dreamy response, her eyes focused on Alex.

“……” Ellen’s eyes became as big as saucers. “Ex-CUSE me?!”

“Do you mind…?” she murmured, looking right past her at Alex again. “I was enjoying that kiss…even if he is playing hard to get…hehe…”

Ellen’s jaw was practically to the pavement by now. “Okay, you have officially gone COMPLETELY off the deep end. I am taking you home, NOW.”

“Hey, wait a minute, will someone explain to me what’s going on here?” Alex nearly demanded. “One second I’m hanging out with someone I think is a nice new friend and the next second she’s trying to…make out with me!”

“Like you were complaining,” Ellen growled, hoisting Grace up.

“Yes, as a matter of fact, I was!” Alex countered. “I tried to tell her I wasn’t interested in her like that, but she wouldn’t listen! If my boyfriend saw that, he’s going to flip!”

“Oh, please, you’d have to be gay to not want Gra--” Ellen froze mid-speech. “…I’m sorry, did…did you say…your boyfriend?”

“……” Alex reddened for a brief moment. “…I, uh…um…whoops…”

“…Whoa. You ARE ga--”

“Shh! Not so loud!” he shushed her, looking around conspiratorially. “Oh man, I hope no one heard that…”

“…So wait, all this time, you weren’t, like, hitting on her?” Ellen marveled.

“No, of course not. I was just trying to make a friend, and I thought she was doing the same thing,” Alex insisted. “Jeez, can’t a guy be nice to a girl without being accused of hitting on her or getting hit on BY her?”

“……” Ellen stared at him in shock, and part of her wanted to probe further, but she shook it off after a moment. Grace had to come first. She could worry about getting his side of the story later. “Listen, um…Alex…I really, really hate to run off right now, but I need to deal with Grace, she’s…um…she’s going through a weird time, it’s a long story, and I don’t know exactly how to explain it. But I’m sorry she caused you trouble.”

Alex sighed and rubbed his forehead, but eventually nodded. “It’s alright…just, uh…don’t say anything about…”

“I won’t,” she promised, and with a quick wave goodbye she dragged Grace away from him toward the parking lot.

“Heyyy, what’re you doing? I wanna be with Alex…” Grace whined, sounding completely unlike herself.

“Grace, I love you and all…but shut up,” Ellen ordered, hauling her into the car.

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By the time Ellen had gotten her back to the Dunkel residence, Grace had returned to her right state of mind again. Ellen, however, would have almost preferred she was still lost in fantasy land, because the moment she realized what she’d done, she broke down into hysterics and began crying into Ellen’s shoulder, and hadn’t stopped for the last half-hour.

“Um…there, there…” Ellen tried awkwardly to comfort her as they sat on the living room couch. “It’s gonna be okay…”

“No it won’t…it won’t ever be okay…!” Grace wailed. “I KISSED him! I KISSED ALEX! Why did I DO that?!”

Ellen cleared her throat. “Yeah, um, Grace, about that, I think there’s something you need to--”

“Oh God, what’s WRONG with me?!” Grace cut her off with another sob. “I just completely lost control, I didn’t even CARE for a minute, I…!”

“Yeah, I know, Grace, just listen for a second, you’re--”

“I felt like I wanted…like I wanted to--!”

“I know!” Ellen shouted, stopping her. “…I know.”

“You do…?”

“Yeah. You wanted to have sex with him, didn’t you?”

Grace jolted, partly from the unpleasant reality of Ellen’s words, and partly in surprise that she had figured it out. “How did you know…?”

“…Grace, I think I’ve found out what’s been happening to you lately,” Ellen began.

“You have?!” Grace nearly burst out, wiping roughly at her tears. “Tell me, please! Whatever it is, tell me, so I can get rid of it!”

“…Uhhm…see, that’s the thing…I don’t think you CAN get rid of it.”

“Wh…what?! Why not?!”

“Well, because…you see…well, if it’s what I think it is, anyway…you wouldn’t be able to get rid of it because it’s kinda sorta ingrained into your DNA…”

“My DNA is making me cheat on Tedd?!”

Ellen reddened a bit. ‘N-not exactly. It’s more like…”

“Like what?!”

Ellen reddened even further. “…Grace, I think…I think you might be in heat.”

“……” Grace stared blankly for a moment, the words apparently meaningless to her. “In heat…? You mean like…I’m getting too much sun?”

“…No, um…y’see…”

Grace squeezed Ellen’s shoulder. “Ellen, you gotta tell me…I want to know…”

“……” Ellen sighed, and nodded resignedly. “Okay, but you’re not going to like it…”

“It’s not like I don’t deserve it, after what I did…” Grace murmured dejectedly.

“No, Grace, don’t say that…”

“It’s the truth…”

“No, it’s not!” Ellen insisted. “That’s just it, Grace…what’s been happening to you is totally out of your control!”

“…H-huh…?”

“See…we learned something new in biology class today…we were talking about how smaller mammals reproduce, and well…”

“Yeah…?” Grace probed.

“…Most of them have this…cycle…where they get a super-powerful urge to…well…have sex.”

“……” Grace’s eyes widened a bit. “Wh…why?”

“So they can have babies, basically. It’s all part of the whole circle of life thing. Ensure the survival of the species an’ stuff.”

“…Aww…” Grace managed to coo, warmed just slightly by the thought of little baby animals.

“Yeah, so…basically they get that instinct, and it’s called being in heat, and it happens to a lot of small mammals…including squirrels.”

It was then that Grace started to get it. “S…squirrels…?”

“Yeah…and since you’ve got some squirrel DNA…I figured that’s what was happening to you. Because, see, it’s supposed to be this really super-strong instinct that they can’t really control, it just makes them look for the best-looking ‘mates’ and, uh…y’know…makes them wanna…”

Grace was pale as a ghost by now, staring blankly at Ellen. “My DNA is making me want to run out and…and do…dirty things with Alex because he LOOKS GOOD?! So I can have babies?!”

“…Basically, yeah, if my guess is right…and since you were focusing a lot on good-looking guys like Alex, I figured those instincts were probably tellin’ ya it’d be a really good idea to, uh…y’know, um…get some lovin’ on with him…and uh…that’s how I knew…” Ellen finished, blushing horribly by contrast.

“……” Grace fell silent, turning to stare blankly off into space, as though she’d gone numb. But at least she wasn’t crying anymore, Ellen thought, and that was surely a plus.

“…Grace?” Ellen tried.

“…So that’s why…why I felt so attracted to all the guys?” Grace asked. “Why Tedd and Elliot and Justin all felt really attractive? Why I…kissed Alex…?”

“…Well, it was kinda way past a kiss by the time I got there, but…yeah, basically,” Ellen said.

“Ohh God, I can’t believe I did that…” Grace moaned pitiably, burying her face in her hands. “What’s Alex going to think of me now…? He probably thinks I’m insane…ohh, and how am I gonna tell Tedd…?”

Ellen felt a jab of guilt at those words. “Uhh…about that…um…Tedd kind of…saw you.”

Grace twitched violently, whirling on her. “He what?!”

“Yeah…I’d talked to him earlier and told him maybe it would be a good idea for you guys to spend some time together instead of with Alex, and he was coming to pick you up, but then he saw that and…well…” Ellen trailed off, wincing.

“Ohh God, this is the worst day EVER…!”

“I’m sorry, Grace…I thought it would be a good idea, it just…backfired…”

Grace hung her head again, looking about ready to collapse into renewed tears, but she held them back, resolved to just sniffling now.

“…Are you…gonna be okay?” Ellen asked after a few moments.

“…I don’t know…” Grace murmured. “Tedd saw me kiss another boy…he must HATE me now…”

“Oh, come on, I’m sure he doesn’t HATE you…”

“After what he saw, he probably thinks I want to…break up…”

“Grace, come on, be reasonable…if you just explain everything to him, he’ll understand…”

“It doesn’t matter…even if he doesn’t hate me now, he probably will soon,” Grace countered with another sniffle. “If…if what you’re saying about my DNA is true, then…what am I supposed to do about it? It’s been getting worse and worse every day. How can I even trust myself to go outside if I’m just going to pounce all over any boy that I see…?”

“I…I don’t know. I wish I had an answer, Grace, but I just don’t know enough about the subject. I don’t know how to make a natural, basic instinct just go away…”

Ellen looked down in defeat as she spoke, but Grace on the other hand seemed to gain a sudden concentration at her words, as though something had hit her.

“Grace…?”

“…natural instincts…” she murmured, dawning comprehension growing across her face as she jumped to her feet. “I…I have to see Tedd…”

Ellen blinked in surprise. “…Right now?”

“Yes…right now…he deserves to know the truth…”

“……” Ellen nodded. “Yeah…that’s a good idea. Better talk it out ASAP then wait around until it gets really bad…”

“Thanks, Ellen…I don’t know what I would’ve done without you today…”

Ellen shook her head, guilt returning to her quickly. “Don’t say that. I’m the whole reason this mess got this far. I wasn’t paying attention and let you walk off and miss class…if you’d been there we could have figured this out together right then and there, and that stupid kiss never would’ve happened…I’m sorry, Grace, it’s all my fault…I broke my promise…”

“None of this mess is your fault, Ellen,” Grace assured her. “It’s all MY weird DNA…there was no way you could’ve known.”

“But still, I--”

“No, Ellen,” Grace said firmly. “Don’t blame yourself. I never should have put the burden on you. This is MY problem, and darn it, I’m gonna go FIX it!”

“Fix it? Fix it how?” Ellen echoed. “You can’t just make instincts like that go away…”

“Maybe not…or maybe I can. I have an idea.”

“…what kind of idea?”

“…I’ll tell you later. If it works…” Grace murmured.

Ellen searched her expression for some hint of what the other girl was planning, but found nothing. Which seriously worried her. “…Grace, are you sure you know what you’re doing…?” she probed, her curiosity unwilling to be suppressed.

“I hope so…” Grace said, far from convincingly, and was out the door before Ellen could say another word.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Amon Star on Fri Jul 18, 2008 11:56 am

Ooh, nearly done, a? I wonder what Grace is planning? I bet it involves the CMD somehow.

Oh, and for the record Ellen, you don't have to be gay to object to a girl throwing themselves at you. You of all people should know that.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Atashi-Cloud on Fri Jul 18, 2008 12:47 pm

can't wait for the next(and possibly last) chapter to go up.^^; this has been a great read thus far.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Nasrudith on Sat Jul 19, 2008 9:51 pm

I have a strong feeling that this plan will end up with her throwing herself at a very upset Tedd. Which likely wouldn't end well at all....
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) UPDATED JULY 18TH!

Postby Helseth on Sat Jul 19, 2008 11:51 pm

Everything i have to say has already been said so

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

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Basic Instinct

Chapter Ten: What a Squirrel Needs

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It was strange. He thought he’d be crying more. Heck, he thought he’d be outright sobbing and leaving big wet stains on his pillow. But no, it wasn’t anything quite so dramatic. No sobs broke the silence of his room, no tears rolled down his face other than the slight wetness to his eyes. He just felt blank and hollow inside. Like he couldn’t feel anything anymore. Which pretty much wasn’t far from the truth. He felt the vague pulls of anger and sadness and heartbreak, certainly, and he was sure he’d feel them full force eventually. But for the most part he was just numb, unsure if he could ever even begin to wrap his mind around what he’d seen.

Not that what he had seen was confusing or ambiguous in any way, of course, Tedd thought with a slightly bitter laugh. That part was pretty clear. Grace kissed Alex. And he could say that with pretty solid confidence, rather than the other way around. It was painfully obvious that it had been Grace doing the kissing and making the advances. She’d been pressing him to the wall, practically crawling on top of him in her eagerness to squeeze their lips together, so insistent on it that Alex had barely seemed able to get a word in edgewise, figuratively speaking. Tedd had once liked to think that that part was never lacking in their relationship, that maybe despite his physical inadequacies, just maybe, he might not be too bad a kisser. But good lord, he’d never seen Grace kiss anyone like that before, least of all him. That level of passion just didn’t ever come out of her while they were together.

Clearly, however, Alex brought it out of her almost without even trying. He and Grace had known each other for a few days at the most, and already he had her so turned on she couldn’t keep herself from furiously making out with him in public. There was no way in hell Tedd could compete with that. And really, he should have seen it coming. From the moment she had met Alex, she just hadn’t been the same. Somewhere inside of him, way in the back of his head, a small, meek voice had known days ago that it was the beginning of the end, but like an idiot, he’d pushed that voice down and suppressed it, had dared to hope that things would turn out all right.

But just like his mother, Grace had ditched him. That voice had been right. Of course it had been right. It was always right. He should have listened to it. He should have known better. Maybe then he could have spared himself at least a little of the heartbreak he felt…

A soft knock at his door reached his ears just then, telling him it was Grace who was behind it. She was probably stopping by to tell him it was over. He hoped as much, anyway. At least if that was the case it would mean she was done lying to him, Tedd thought with a sudden and very unpleasant swoop of anger. If she’d wanted to be with Alex so bad she could have had the courtesy to not lead him on for a few extra days with insincere kisses and fake ‘I love you’s.

“Tedd…?” he quiet voice drifted in through the door. “Are you in there…?”

“It’s open,” Tedd grunted, surprising himself with how hollow the words sounded.

Grace must have been surprised by it too, because it was several seconds before she actually opened the door, and several more before she stepped far enough into the room so that she could see him, her audible footsteps telling Tedd she was human for the moment. He felt another slight bit of surprise as he saw her as well, and noticed her eyes were red and puffy, like she’d been crying. For a second it yanked violently at his heartstrings and made him want to jump up and hug her and kiss her and do anything to make her feel better; but then he remembered what he’d seen at school and why she was probably here to see him, and that desire was pushed down again.

“…So…” Grace began slowly, “…I guess…you saw what happened at school…”

“I’m surprised you even noticed me. You seemed so busy,” Tedd shot back, more bitterly than he’d intended, and he was thankful he wasn’t looking at her at the moment because he was sure the words would make that look on her face even more gut wrenching.

Indeed, though he didn’t notice it, Grace winced and had to blink back a couple of tears before she could go on. “Tedd, you have no idea how sorry I am, you have every right to be upset…”

“I’m fine,” Tedd lied. “I get it. You want him. That’s great. Go on, you can have him. I don’t care.”

“Yes you do, Tedd…” Grace said knowingly. “But it’s not like that, I swear…”

“You made out with him. In public.”

“I know, Tedd, but--”

“You never kissed me like that even in private.”

“Tedd, I swear, I can explain--”

“Well maybe I don’t want to hear it!” Tedd suddenly shouted. “Maybe I already know exactly what you’re going to say and I don’t need to have it rubbed in my face! I get it, okay?! We’re over! You don’t want me anymore, you want him!”

“We’re not ‘over,’ Tedd, I swear! Please, Tedd, just let me explain…” Grace begged. “I understand why you’re upset! I would be, too! But I swear, if you just give me a chance to--”

“To what?” Tedd stopped her. “Give me a good reason for lying to me the last few days with all that ‘I love you’ talk?”

“I’d never!” Grace said back immediately. “I’d never lie about that, Tedd, I love you more than anything!”

“Then what, was making out with Alex just an ‘experiment’ or something?” Tedd suggested with a derisive sneer.

“No, Tedd, I swear, that…that wasn’t me…”

“Don’t lie to me!” Tedd shouted. “The only way anyone could be pretending to be you is with your clone form in the TF Gun, and no one’s used that without my knowing it!”

Grace winced again. “No, I mean…it was me, but…it wasn’t…me…”

“It was you but it wasn’t you?” Tedd snorted disbelievingly. “What, are you schizophrenic now or someth--”

“Tedd, STOP IT!!!” Grace suddenly screamed.

If only in sheer surprise, Tedd shut his mouth, and his surprise kept growing when he realized just how upset she looked now. Tears were running freely down her cheeks, though she did nothing to stop them or wipe them away, and she was shaking so badly Tedd wondered how she was still standing. What was going on? Why was she so upset…? Were things really not the way he’d convinced himself they were? Could he really dare to get his hopes up…?

“Please, just…stop talking like that…” Grace said, her voice dropping to a meek whisper. “It hurts…it hurts so much…”

Once again Tedd felt that intense pull at his heart to jump up and pull her into a crushing hug and never let her go. And this time the urge wasn’t going away. That little voice in his head was still telling him not to be a fool, not to get his hopes up again, but even that part of him hated seeing the pain in Grace’s expression and agreed to shut up for the moment.

“…All right,” Tedd finally said. His voice still sounded hollow, but at least the anger and malice was gone from it. “…I’m sorry.”

“…It’s okay…” Grace said back. “…I’ve probably hurt you even worse than that…”

Tedd said nothing to that.

“…But I swear, Tedd, I never, ever meant to hurt you…just give me a chance to explain what happened…”

“…Okay,” Tedd agreed, against the urge of that voice in his head, that didn’t want him to get his hopes up. He couldn’t listen to it. The risk was worth it. He loved her too much not to hope. “…I’m listening.”

“Thank you…” she whispered, and took a few breaths to collect herself. “…Tedd, there’s…something I’ve been keeping from you for a couple of days…”

In the pit of his stomach, Tedd winced immediately. That was not the start he’d hoped for.

“I…haven’t really been myself lately. I’ve been having these weird feelings and dreams and…urges, all week.”

“…Like what?” Tedd dared to ask.

“I’ve been…noticing boys more, for some reason.”

Again Tedd winced inwardly. “…Oh.”

“…At first it really wasn’t much of anything…little things like…noticing Justin’s hair looked nice, or Elliot had a cute smile, or…”

“…Um…” Tedd muttered, coughing.

Grace blushed. “…or…having…naughty dreams…”

Tedd blushed right behind her. “…O-oh…”

“I didn’t really think anything of it at first,” Grace quickly moved on. “I mean it was a little weird, but I was handling it…until I met Alex…”

“…So you do like him,” Tedd said quietly.

“…I…found him attractive, yeah…” Grace admitted. “But it was still weird. When I was around him…I’d just go blank. I wouldn’t even be aware of what I was doing. I would just fawn over him and laugh with him and get all overheated watching him play sports and--”

“Is this supposed to make me feel better?” Tedd stopped her. “Because it’s not.”

“Tedd, I’m trying to say, it wasn’t me feeling that way. Not really. Not this me standing here. Some…other part of me took over every time I saw him, and I…I couldn’t control myself, Tedd…that awful part of me did whatever it wanted…that’s the part of me that…kissed him…”

Tedd frowned. “…Grace, I know hormones can be really strong and really confusing, but you can’t blame it on some kind of ‘other self.’ Everyone had urges they have to keep under control.”

“Not like this,” Grace insisted. “This is way worse than that, trust me. Ellen’s seen it, Ellen knew something was really, really wrong with me…and just today she figured it out…”

“Figured what out?”

“…Tedd, d’you know what happens to a lot of mammals after winter is over? Including squirrels?”

“Well of course, after they wake up from hibernation, a lot of mammals go into a reproduc…tive…cy……cle……” Tedd trailed off.

Grace nodded slowly, blushing deep. “…Yeah…”

Tedd’s eyes widened, staring at her. “Are…are you saying you’re…”

Grace nodded. “…That’s what Ellen thinks, anyway. Because of my squirrel DNA. And it fits. It explains…why I kept noticing boys, and why I was all over Alex. When certain mammals are in heat, including squirrels, they get really, really strong urges to find the most…physically appealing mates. And to…um…”

“…Have sex with them,” Tedd finished rather bluntly.

Grace shuddered slightly, but nodded. “…Yes.”

Tedd stared at her for a long time, trying to comprehend everything she’d said. Was it really possible? Did she not really want to go out with Alex instead? Was it really just primitive, basic instinct that made her kiss him? Because he was a ‘physically appealing mate?’ But then why Alex? Why not him…?

“…You’re really serious about this,” Tedd eventually stated.

Grace nodded slowly. “I’d never lie about something like this, Tedd. I swear it’s the truth. These instincts keep telling me to…find the best mates I can…”

“And you chose Alex,” Tedd added, his tone slowly darkening again.

“No, Tedd, I didn’t choose anyone!” Grace quickly corrected him. “I didn’t have any control over it! The instincts just kept taking over! My body was doing it all on its own!”

“It still chose Alex. It’s pretty obvious what that means.”

“But Tedd, you’re--”

“Don’t say it, Grace,” Tedd muttered. “You know it’s a lie. I’ve always been this shrimpy little stick figure with big stupid glasses. Alex is a Greek God compared to me. Of course you’d pick him over me. You’d pick anyone over me…”

“No, Tedd, I wouldn’t! That’s the point! How I felt had nothing to do with it!” Grace shouted.

“Yeah, well, I guess it doesn’t matter now,” Tedd blew it off. “Obviously these instincts of yours are telling you to have sex with Alex, so you might as well go and--”

“Tedd Verres, don’t you DARE finish that sentence!!!”

Tedd nearly stumbled at the suddenly furious words flowing from Grace’s lips. He’d never heard her talk like that before. Not once.

“…Grace--”

“No, you be QUIET and LISTEN to me!” she ordered him. “I don’t care what those stupid instincts want me to do! That horrible side of me just wants nothing but empty, meaningless sex! It doesn’t care even a little bit about love! But I do, Tedd! I don’t want meaningless sex, I want to be with my boyfriend who I love more than anything else in the whole world! I love YOU, Tedd! I want YOU, I…I need you…!”

Tedd’s knees shook. “Y…you do…?”

“Of course I do, you stupid idiot…!” she insisted, her anger fading and her normal self slowly returning. “I don’t care who these stupid instincts are telling me to latch on to! They can tell me all they want that I should be having sex with Alex, but no matter what, Tedd, I will never, ever, ever want that, and the only person I ever would want that with is…!”

“…is…?” Tedd slowly asked, blushing hard, somehow already knowing her answer.

“…is…you…” Grace whispered the last bit.

“…O-oh…” Tedd murmured, stunned nevertheless. “…R…really…?”

Grace, too, was crimson by now. “…who’d you think the dirty dreams were about, huh…?”

“…Grace…”

“…So there,” she finished. “That’s why…all this stuff that’s been happening this week…that’s the reason. I’m sorry, Tedd…I should’ve told you in the first place…I was just so embarrassed, I couldn’t make myself say something…and then it just kept getting worse…”

Tedd put a hand to his heart, still feeling crippling pain there. But it was a new pain now. Now instead of the pain of thinking he’d lost Grace, it was the pain of berating himself for ever thinking anything badly of her. He’d been a fool, all right. Not for hoping, but for ever giving that hope up.

“…Can you ever forgive me…?” Grace whispered.

Immediately Tedd drew her into the tight, protective hug he’d been wanting to give her since the conversation started. “I’m the one who should be apologizing, Grace…I’m the one who let myself think badly of you…I’m the one who didn’t trust you…”

“I still should’ve told you the truth…” Grace countered. “Maybe if I had, none of this would’ve happened…”

“You had no way of knowing what was really happening to you…” Tedd assured her. “No one did. Yours is a…pretty unique case…”

“Yeah…” Grace admitted. “Not many squirrel girls in the world, huh…?”

“One is all I want…”

Grace looked up at him with a renewed smile, and before he could say another word she was kissing him and he was kissing back, the weights that had been hanging over them finally lifted.

Almost.

Tedd felt Grace break the kiss earlier than he would have liked, and as he opened his eyes he saw that she was oddly flushed and breathing heavier than usual. “Grace?” he asked. “Are you okay…?”

“Yeah…” she assured him. “It’s just…you know, the instincts thing…”

“…They’re still getting worse, aren’t they?”

“…Yes,” Grace admitted, and again she began to blush. “…I…I don’t think I can keep fighting them anymore, Tedd. If I do, sooner or later…something’s going to snap…”

“…Well…” Tedd started, looking off distantly in thought. “I could…look into some TF Gun modifications and try to isolate and suppress that gene--”

“No, Tedd…” she said, putting her hands on his cheeks and pulling him to face her again. “I meant…I don’t want to fight it anymore…”

“……” Tedd suddenly gulped. “O-oh…um…w-wow, Grace, I…”

“…Like I said…if I keep fighting it, it just gets worse. It’s just like any other instinct. You fight sleep and the instinct to sleep gets stronger and stronger. Same with eating. Same with breathing. And the only way to really get rid of the instinct is to…do what it says…”

“B-but…Grace, it…it wouldn’t be right…” Tedd stammered. “You haven’t been yourself…I-I don’t want to take advantage of…”

“You’re not…” Grace insisted. “Honestly, Tedd…I’m thinking more clearly now than I have been all week. And…there’s nothing I want more than…to be with you…”

“…I…want to be with you too…” Tedd admitted.

Grace smiled wider, not needing to say anything else. She kissed him again, and this time it was much more electric, much more heated and passionate. He almost couldn’t believe it was happening, really. But when they fell back and landed on his bed together mid-kiss and bonked their heads together somewhat painfully, he was pretty positive it was real.

“S-sorry…” Grace murmured.

“It’s okay…” Tedd assured her, and gulped again at the feeling of her gentle weight pressed on top of him. “You, um…you’re sure about this…?”

“……” Grace nodded. “Completely…”

“…Heh…okay then…”

A second later their lips met once again. And unlike the previous ones, it would be quite a while before this one was truly broken.

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Epilogue: One romantic weekend later…

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“Wow…no wonder I didn’t hear from you ‘til this morning.”

Grace nodded, wearing a big smile on her face as she rooted around through her locker amidst the general din of the Monday morning masses chattering and slamming locker doors in the minutes before the first bell of the day. “Yeah…I guess I was pretty busy…hehe…”

“So you patched everything up with him?”

Grace nodded. “Mmhmm. He was so understanding…I can’t believe how understanding he was…”

“He must really love you.”

Grace glowed. “Yeah…he really does…and I really love him too…”

“Guess that kiss was really meant for him, then, huh?”

Grace winced at that, and closed her locker so that she could see her friend’s face. “…About that, Alex…”

Alex shook his head, slapping his own locker closed and dropping his books for the day in his backpack. “Grace, you really don’t have to--”

“Yes I do…I have to say I’m sorry,” she cut him off. “…I was…totally out of line the other day.”

“…It’s okay, Grace, really…everything turned out okay, didn’t it?”

“Still…it could’ve been a lot worse. But I swear it’s never gonna happen again,” she added quickly. “I didn’t even know what I was doing, I wasn’t thinking straight. Normally I NEVER would’ve done something like that. I was just…repressing a lot of stuff…but it’s taken care of now. And I’d…really like it if we could still be friends.”

Alex smiled slightly. “Of course we’re still friends, Grace.”

“Really? You’re not mad or anything…?”

“Nah…trust me, I know what you mean about being repressed…and it was just a kiss.”

Grace blushed a bit. “I’m really sorry…I hope I didn’t mess things up with your boyfriend…”

“I promise, we’re fine. Forget about it. Water under the bridge.”

Grace smiled at that. “Thank you…”

“Don’t mention it,” he said, smiling back. “Still want to have that video game night sometime?”

Grace nodded immediately. “Absolutely…but um…can I bring my boyfriend…?”

“The more the merrier,” he agreed. “We can make a double date out of it, even.”

“Awesome,” Grace said with a grin. “And maybe we can try playing foots ball!”

“Heh…it’s football…”

“Oh, right…and um…how do you play, again?” she asked, turning to walk to class.

Alex chuckled, and turned to walk with her. “Alright, alright…it goes something like this…”

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THE END

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Author's Notes: Finally, it's done. I'm a bit annoyed at myself for taking over a year to finish it considering it's only ten chapters long, but at least it's finally complete.

Hope you all liked this fic, and will keep an eye out for any future EGS fics I may decide to put out. Thanks for reading, and as always, comments and critiques are welcomed and appreciated.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby Amon Star on Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:46 am

All together now.

AHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

That was brilliant, sweet, funny in places, a generally good read. Two Thumbs Up! :)
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby twilightdusk on Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:19 pm

*Round of applause* Excellent story. good writing over all, but there's one line near the end that confused me a bit:

Grace blushed a bit. “I’m really sorry…I hope I didn’t mess things up with your boyfriend…”


Not that I have anything against gay people, but am I forgetting something from an earlier chapter, was that a typo, or are you now saying that Alex is gay?
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby Amon Star on Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:24 pm

twilightdusk wrote:*Round of applause* Excellent story. good writing over all, but there's one line near the end that confused me a bit:

Grace blushed a bit. “I’m really sorry…I hope I didn’t mess things up with your boyfriend…”


Not that I have anything against gay people, but am I forgetting something from an earlier chapter, was that a typo, or are you now saying that Alex is gay?

Alex was established as gay in chapter nine, so yeah, it ain't no typo.
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Postby twilightdusk on Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:59 pm

Ah :oops: sorry, you forget these things when there's a gap :(
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby solemnwarning on Fri Aug 01, 2008 1:42 pm

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby Ineluki on Fri Aug 01, 2008 1:45 pm

Awwwright Cid, so I remember you prefered to have the feedback in here and since I gotta write it from scratch anyway, here goes...

First of all: nice. Very nice. But you already know why I enjoyed it... we're both great fans of Grace after all ;)

Now about the writing from a pure objective perspective:
  • there is some really awsome dialoge in there - but it seems like it got a bit sloppy towards the end. I'll have to reread it in one piece some time to be sure... but most of it is great. If you focus, you can do better than some already published novelists.
  • then there is the plot-setup. very well and elaborately done, however some parts are redundant - especially the part at the gym. the reader learns nothing new there, only Ellen does, but that could be established for the reader in 1 short paragraph. bad for the pacing.
  • the dreams: there is some wasted potential in my opinion. they were very straight-forward, not cryptic at all. they basically served their purpose to bring the character's mood across pretty good, but it could have been much more.
  • there are some little oversights concerning relations in the first chapters. in some dialoge it seems as if you forgot what relationship Nanase and Tedd have and the same goes for Ellen and Tedd. Minor stuff however, probably went unnoticed by most.

But now for the most important part: predictability. I think you did a pretty good job with it in Twin Envy (though I can't be 100% sure, since I read B.I. first and got a few hints to a "dark-Sarah" which spoiled a lot, but still...)
Anyway, this here is way too predictable. You can't go 28k words without a single twist in it and this story had none unfortunately. The whole heat story became obvious in the first 3 or 4 chapters (don't remember exactly now) and then the cat is out of the bag so to speak. No misdirection, only watching the train wreck.
But this isn't enough. Why? We know these characters. We know how understanding they are and since it's heat it would die down after some time anyway. There may be some ruffled feathers between the two, but as a reader you don't really believe that it could become a permanent problem. So it's missing tension. To fix this, the story would either need a huge twist somewhere in the middle or more tension into other directions. But a single story-line that can be predicted before the last chapter cannot support a short story that long on it's own.

Right, let's sum it up: I strongly encourage you to write more. Take your time, stay focused, but also plan ahead. It's what this story is missing imo. It's a great read for a fanfic, but I see how much better you could do. Make yourself plain what you need to do to keep suspense and pacing up and enough twists in to keep the readers on their toes.
Wait, actually... don't take so much time as a whole year if possible. Plan ahead with something that keeps your interest up, then write it down as fast as you can, before you get bored with it. You might notice that it becomes much easier to write stories at a better pace then.
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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby Helseth on Sat Aug 02, 2008 12:47 am

A long time in the making but definitely worth the wait!

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby CidGregor on Sat Aug 02, 2008 8:23 am

Thanks, everybody, for all the comments.

twilightdusk: I do understand how you might forget things like that, and I am sorry for the long gaps between chapters. I seem to consistently struggle with motivation these days, and this fic was rather unfortunately crippled as a result. It took me 16 months to write these 10 chapters. That's one chapter every 6-7 weeks. An absolutely atrocious rate of output.

Ineluki: Yeah, I admit this story wasn't exactly complicated, plot-wise, and it probably could have been better overall if I'd done more with the story, but at least in this case, the fic was about the characters more than the story. That's why it was relatively simple: it wasn't the plot that was important so much as how everyone reacted to and handled it. But I agree, as I said above, that I took way too long with this, and it definitely affected the story. If I do another EGS fanfic I will definitely try to be better about update speed.

Helseth, Amon, solemn, and everyone else who left their kind comments, thanks from the bottom of my heart for staying with me to the end. Y'all are awesome.

Cheers, everyone.

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Re: FANFIC: Basic Instinct (T) FINISHED AUGUST 1ST!

Postby Nasrudith on Fri Aug 08, 2008 12:03 pm

Just found out that this fic finished. Nice I'll be sure to follow your next fic should you choose to write it.
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