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[S.T.O.R.Y. 5/11/02] Squirrel hop!

PostPosted: Thu Dec 25, 2008 9:21 pm
by Chaos Priest
http://www.egscomics.com/d/20020511.html

You know, I have to admit that full-squirrel Grace is a pretty adorable creature, especially with the headband around it's tail, but I'm afraid that as much as it weighed back then it would have caused some serious damage on it's landing.

Critically speaking here for a moment, I don't really like the way the dialog is done in the first panel. It just looks a sloppy that way, like a badly written fanfic with illustrations.

Re: [S.T.O.R.Y. 5/11/02] Squirrel hop!

PostPosted: Fri Dec 26, 2008 12:20 am
by Tarvok
Actually, I used to like the "screenplay" format for fanfiction quite a bit more than "story" format. I used to read Daria fanfics by a fellow calling himself (herself?) "C. E. Forman" that blended into the canon so well I'd occasionally and unknowingly reference events that occurred in his fics as if they'd occurred in the main series. They were that good, and they were in "screenplay" format. ("Story" format all too often has a "disgorged thesaurus" feel to it.)

Re: [S.T.O.R.Y. 5/11/02] Squirrel hop!

PostPosted: Fri Dec 26, 2008 1:38 am
by SleepyOrigami
Chaos Priest wrote:... but I'm afraid that as much as it weighed back then it would have caused some serious damage on it's landing.


Back then? I know that after getting hit by the TF beam she gained the ability to change her mass, but does that mean she lost the ability to transform into a heavy full squirrel?

Re: [S.T.O.R.Y. 5/11/02] Squirrel hop!

PostPosted: Fri Dec 26, 2008 4:55 am
by Unforgiven
Heh, no better way to confuse people than leaving tiny footprints in he asphalt. :)

Re: [S.T.O.R.Y. 5/11/02] Squirrel hop!

PostPosted: Fri Dec 26, 2008 8:07 pm
by ChronosCat
== Spring, 2006 ==

Chronos: The different ways she transforms is interesting. However, in her fear of being locked, she seems to have forgotten that she was looking forward to the cat form - and that she was hoping it would lock her and her brothers.

== Dec 26, 2008 - 10:50 PM, Version A ==

Crystal: Oh, so there was a little bit of point to the "try harder" side-track - we get info on how Grace initiates her transformations. Hmm... I better let my past self know before she posts. (Well, actually, I could just let her post it, then use the edit button - but how fun is that?)

*Heads back in time.*

== Dec 26, 2008 - 10:50 PM, Version B ==

Crystal: I see what my future self was saying.

*Another version of Crystal appears, and sees this version of herself still in the room.*

Newly-arrived-Crystal: Hey, what are you still doing here?! You have to go let our past self know the "try harder" sidetrack isn't totally pointless!

Still-there-Crystal: Oh, right. *Vanishes*

== Dec 26, 2008 - 11:07 PM ==

*Crystal finishes typing up this sequence of events, and finally posts it.*